All Comments on 'Modeling in Amsterdam'

Overall... Brava! Great plot and idea. Although, I think that it could be even better if you were to get rid some of the commas and replace them with either colons, semi-colons or even periods. Also, if you make your piece a bit longer and add in some sexual tension/frustration, it would lure your audience in more. Hope this helps you improve your style and voice!

This was an uncomfortable example of manipulation by an artist with no ethics. Not admirable. Not pleasant.