All Comments on 'Mom & Son Gateaway Pt. 01'

Very good start. Looking forward to more. I only saw one major typo that you can easily fix. Instead of "poverty" , i think you meant "puberty".

Where were they living that it took time to find the car? How did the narrator conclude his grandmother was surprised but didn't show it. I realize these are minor items but if they catch the reader's attention, the story flow suffers.

No contextof what is going on with the parents marriage is hard to root for the 2 trying to get away

Gave it an average it was too mixed up what was the rush to run away was the father beating his mother why she was so afraid? Please continue further with this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You needed a back story explaining how it started between them why did she feel the need to run away so fast and what lie did she tell her son you literally started the story in the middle not from beginning