by blozo
I meant for it to be humorous, not sexually stimulating.
Sorry for the confusion.
This story is solid, worth 5 stars, but you have it in the wrong category. It should have been humor/satire ... unless you meant for it be real, in which case, the joke's on me. I laughed, though. Nice story, fun ready, "humor/satire," would have doubled the score.
I really enjoyed the story. I was laughing even while I was thinking of the Mom's nipples. 10 stars.
I wanted to hate this story, especially when you referred to girls as pigs, but it was written in the perfect listless stoner unemployed gamer’s voice that it worked really well.
I also love that the chance knobby did not turn ito a love story with his mom, but rather got his sorry ass thrown out.
Yeah, I gave you 5 stars. But I may need to go shower! ;)
Please see my comment of the Authors' Hangout bulletin board (Breaking From Your Usual Style).
Reconsidering this - the abstract, minimalist, whatever it could be called approach: that is a valid way to go too.
Never read anything quite like it...
No Romance
No Realism
No Bullshit
Straight to the point and pretty funny
Definitely would read more from this author
"All my life people told me I can be whatever I want to be. Well, what I want to be is a guy who plays video games and jacks off all day."
Schopenhauer would understand I think.
The scenario is perfectly written.
If only we would have a cinematic version of this story on bigboobsblowjob.com ... it would be incredible.