- Loving Wives
- Money for Sex
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All Comments on 'Money for Sex'
by Skippy47
- 91 Comments
other2other111 months agoDamm, Abigail that was evil, don’t know that she will see her dead husband again…
maninconn11 months agoYou always have a twist! It seems they all deserve each other, and can move on to the life they deserve. Thanks for writing!
icenz11 months agoYou can’t jump between third person and first person in a story. Very distracting.
tonyneato11 months agoCan't buy me Love ! I'll buy you a diamond ring, my friend, if you will make me feel alright
I don't care too much for money. This story gets 5 stars. well planned.
Gamblnluck11 months agoHope Tim gets something out of it at the end. He might have agreed to be an escort but only after his fiance pushed him.
MonsieurX11 months agoWho’s the protagonist of this story? Abagail Collinswood or Abigail Edgerton? Sloppy.
inka222211 months ago5 stars. First, for slightly reversed situation, second, because it seems everyone got karma they deserve.
- Cheryl got greedy and lost her buff and initially-faithful fiancé AND gained a questionable quality dude who will likely cheat on her in the future
- the dude got Cheryl - who dumped her fiance for no reason - since this was HER idea - and thus is likely to dump him when a richer model comes along
- Abigail got a young guy who seems to only be interested in sex (didn't see anyplace in the story where he actually is attracted to her as a person and not her money or sex?)
- The dude was at the end proposing to stay with Abigail at the expense of Cheryl, so he gets a rich cougar who is probably too old to give him kids; and has very questionable morals - although in all honesty, out of the 4 of those, her morals are the least questionable. And will probably tire of his body (and that was the only reason she was with him) sooner or later; at least in a bit when her libido eventually drops/
Cumminginsiderher11 months agoI normally don't like stories that have no likable characters in them but this was just cheeky enough to override that.
The little nuances of many small and seemingly innocuous statements and thoughts by the main character in this story proved the theory that some people are just so much above others in life station and intellect, it made me laugh. Basically, there are some people in life you hope to avoid because they will manipulate you and you will never even know it happened LOL.
Then again, everything seemed to work out for everyone in the end.
The money-hungry girlfriend got a free vacation and $10k (another $10k if her ex-boyfriend and now new boyfriend shares his $10k bonus lol).
The boyfriend stud got a sex partner that he is extremely pleased with as well as living a life of luxury.
The old woman main character got a new young stud to service her as well as someone she can spend time with.
It looks like a win-win-win all around.
Unassigned11 months agoIn 1700 words, you managed to have the MC shift from a loving widow who seems to be a good person, to John Gage, to the love child of Niccolo Machiavelli and Snidley Whiplash; the Tasmanian Devil doesn't change directions this quickly. I guess this was supposed to be a humorous little bon bon but it just didn't work for me.
Creeperclaw11 months agoMeh, Abigail did both of them a favor.
If he was so willing to have an affair with another woman and she was so eager to get back together with an ex, then neither of them would've lasted in a long-term monogamous marriage.
Dry_opinion11 months agoContradictory. A person with integrity spending money on people without integrity. Didn't see the reasoning.
Did not like the story.
Anonymous11 months agoWell THAT was unexpected. In 1 week, Cheryl meets her ex, falls back in love with him & planning to marry him? Why do I think she's been cheating on Tim for a while? Would like a 2nd chapter on a what happened next, with hopefully Cheryl's marriage messed up, he cheated during their engagement or marriage, or she just woke up. Anyway, 4 stars Bob
Anonymous11 months agoHa!!! Just posted but the last line got my attention. That sly fox Abigail!! Bot
sbrooks103x11 months agoBitch! Why would they be going straight to the honeymoon? Surely he didn't spend a week with Abigail AFTER the wedding?
Anonymous11 months agoIf all it took was one week to forget each other then that wedding is better off not taking place.
Anonymous11 months agoGet an editor. "It was a plan accident that ended their marriage." Can you say, "Verbose?" Can you say, "Excessive and pointless use of passive verbs?" Can you say, "A plane crash ended their marriage?"
You may have created an amazing plot and delightful characters. I will never know because trying to wade through your sentences became such a grating pain I stopped a third of the way down the first page.
Anonymous11 months agoWell, you almost included a wife in the story... Sadly, this isn't Loving Widows, Loving Fiancés, Loving Girlfriends, or even Loving Women. It's called Loving Wives, which should make it pretty clear that the story should not only include, but focus on an actual wife.
Sorry, but the story was pretty bad. You skimmed over the actual sex, which might have made the story worth reading. In fact, you pretty much skimmed over the whole story, never minding the details.
Anonymous11 months agoGave it a three since it wasn't really a loving wives story and the whole premise reeked of "eeewwww".
kirei811 months agoShe should have made a $25,000.00 bonus but only if he left her standing at the altar.
Anonymous11 months agoOr…. Cheryl & Tim we’re con artists and made a living by fuckin‘ money out of old rich dorks. Just saying. ;-)
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Anonymous11 months agoTelegram.....telegram....wtf pony express was busy? I like your story but really 2023 and telegram? Instagram maybe....text message sure but really telegram. SMH
francis_toliver11 months agoDry_Opinion -
The lead in the story was not a person with integrity. She arranged for the girls ex boyfriend to meet and seduce her again so as to free up her target so that she could start a relationship with him. It's a "all is fair in love and war" kind of story.
This was a clever story about three people; none of whom had integrity. If you accept that these were not good people the story is well done and pretty clever. If you don't like stories about folks that are bad but intriguing...
I enjoyed it. 5 stars.
Rw4311 months agoI don't think we need to exert a lot of energy analyzing this one. It's pretty clear.
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Dang, Skippy!
Lickideesplit11 months agoI like how Skippy# uses dialogue to carry most of the story. However, there were several parts where I suspect many of We-The-Readers were scratching our heads due to ambiguity which could have been avoided with a ‘cold read.’
3*
Lickideesplit11 months agoAddendum
My ‘warm read’ of my previous comment tells me I was ‘hoist on my own ‘petard!’ At the end of this tale, it is implied that Sugar Mommy paid-off Sweetie to find an substitute. SM had thought to herself that Sweetie was a ‘Material Girl’! It would have been unlikely that Sweetie would actually have dropped her Intended, because she knew Intended was going to be financially better off than any of their cohort! Awkward, perhaps, when New Fiance got a ten kilobuck check unless Sweetie was more ‘no secrets’ than smart.
A_Bierce11 months agoGosh, Skip, the story doesn't seem to have passed the reality test. Afraid I can manage only 5 stars.
mathur_nk11 months ago"Oh my goodness, your poor dear."
"Maybe not. Abigail, would you consider going out on a date with me?"
"Would it include breakfast?"
"I hope so."
"You know where I am."
"But first complete your first deal"
"What?"
"You promised me 15 day honeymoon with Cheryl at Hawai. I am waiting"
"But you said Cheryl dumped you?"
"I don't care. If you can make her dump me, you can make her and her would be husband agree for 15 days honeymoon with me too"
"But ......".
"Look Abigail, you have already tasted the fruit. You worked big for having it permanently. But you won't be able to get spoils of your crime now onwards till you fulfil your promise in first deal. The proposed date with you will happen only after I return from Hawai with Cheryl. May be a double date with Cheryl and her new husband also. She should feel insecure about her new husband also looking at me and you."
Abigail called her personal secretary. "When you send the money to Cheryl's old boyfriend, send a $10,000 bonus check for him."
FD4511 months agoI get tired of all the stupid women in the stories.
So if a lady gets the better of the deal once in a while, I can quell my outrage.
Anonymous11 months agoAlmost like a movie called "Trailer Trash Wins The Lottery." One suspects the cougar had no morals or ethics to begin with, or why torpedo a promising marriage? In the sequel Tim and Cheryl somehow run into each other, hell, maybe at a homeless shelter, or some conference coincidence; does it matter? They compare notes and realize that they were setup to fail. Touch shit, huh?
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No, actually. An engagement is a valid contract, and a failure to fulfill that contract is called "Breach of promise." Its legal in many states. What is more important is that almost All states have laws that allows injured parties to sue anyone who interferes with a contract, especially if the interfering party benefits from the contract being broken. You got it. If Tim and Cheryl can prove that Abigail hired Cheryl's old boyfriend to fuck up their engagement, they have grounds to sue. Could be an interesting sequel, and the law suit process might just provide the time and opportunity for Cheryl and Tim to reconcile. Just a thought.
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Thanks for the story.
Anonymous11 months agoNOT the usual cliché crap that passes for "erotic fiction" on LW. Therefore, based on your taking a risk and delivering something quite unique, you are awarded the entire 1N73RN37.
Anonymous11 months agolovely switch in focus, a little pedantic but there are no wife's involved. Thanks btw enjoyed the read even if a bit predicable.
Anonymous11 months agoStrange story,money for sex and a fiancée that goes along with the proposal. Then out of the blue he gets a dear John letter as she wants her old boyfriend. REALLY!!!!!!!!!'!!
Anonymous11 months agoHmmmm... the flipside of Indecent Proposal, and just as onerous.
No redeeming characters in this one.
Still, Tim was better off without Cheryl, even before she 'fell in love with the old boyfriend'.
Her capacity to nonchalantly send him off as a male prostitute meant that she really didn't have a moral compass. Then to just ditch him, the man she was about to marry, after a week apart? That was a marriage made in hell waiting to happen.
As for Tim, he should have ditched Cheryl for even considering the proposal, so he is just as bad.
Money seems to destroy the soul.
Anonymous11 months agoSaweeet!!! Gotta say I NEVER saw that coming!!
THANK YOU for a fun to read story!!!
Be Well and Happy
Paul
dgfergie11 months agoYou really must not take these older women for granted, they are a bit devious and there is no substitute for experience!
Ambul11 months agoShort but very sweet. Loved it. And yes, do not take attractive older women for granted
SatyrDick10 months ago[19.07.23]
Sneaky McSneakerson!
On the plus side - she may leave him money!
11/10!!!!!
Anonymous7 months agoAs some commenters said; Tim is much better off without Cheryl. Any woman who would have no problem with her man fucking another woman is insane. That marriage would've been a horror movie.
Abigail did nothing wrong. She tested Cheryl with just a little temptation, she didn't force anything. The choice was on Cheryl and she chose to immediately leave her fiancé.
Abigail did Tim a huge favor.
Anonymous3 months agodamn old rich gal that likes to fuck ?? anybody have a problem with that ?? i sure as hell wouldn't if i was him . good riddance to the fiancee !!
