All Comments on 'More Than She Assked For'

... shall we say, timeworn and hackneyed.

Writing stories is - should be, anyway - hard work (the way some people crank them out, always the same story lines but names and perversions are sometimes different - don't count in that remark) Authors who create new story lines every time work should be recognized - I say this because I suspect that you put a lot of time into the piece you submitted. It was original to you, I'd guess. I think the thing for you to do is write the story - step back and wait a few weeks - and see how the story line differs from a hundred others posted in the last year (or month) IF it really does.

.. a word in the title isn't spelled wrong.

For a first story - very good indeed! I expect you will write more,,and they will get better and better..hope you do!