All Comments on 'Morning Cream'

Please write more and let's make sure there are some sloppy seconds served!!!!

#morecum

when 'Jacob 'heard the 'boyfriend' return he "grabbed his clothes and ran to the living room. He quickly threw himself down on the sofa and covered up with the throw blanket on the back, pulling his clothes under the cover with him."

After the 'boyfriend' had gone again "Jacob came back to the room and quickly stripped out of his clothes."

So, when did he get dressed??

I loved the way write....great stuff...

Make a series

Don't rush the momentum

Really hot story, very well written.

Being yelled at by parents = rough home life?

Im sure he needs help in his life.

So id like to invite him to my house and ill give chores to do to pay his way.

But of course after this story id make sure is put hidden cameras in the bedroom.

So as I would be leaving for work id wake Jacob up and give him a chore he would not have to do untill later.

That way he is awake and as soon as I would leave, he can go take care of his hard life

See the reason for taking him in, is so he can take his 19yo cock and fuck my 48yo wife. Then I can watch through the cameras, without either one knowing.

This was incredibly hard to read. A narrator who is asleep (1st person) cannot tell you what is happening while she is asleep, nor tell you that someone met someone else at a different place, nor tell you what another character is thinking or feeling. You have to choose either 1st person, and then limit yourself to that, or go 3rd person. You can't have it both ways.

Also, Jacob turns into Brandon and back again for no apparent reason. Which is curious - your boyfriend doesn't even have a name, but Jacob/Brandon has two!