by 1965looker
The story would have been better if the dialogue was presented as dialogue rather than described.
Instead of
Melody responded that her daughter ate her out the night before.
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“Melissa ate me out last night.” Melody replied.
WHY did the two characters have to have similar names?? This gets so confusing who is who that for me totally distracted from the story.
Loved it except for the pantyhose comment. Then, again, there's the sequel, that you simply must write. I can't wait to read it.
While reading this, I could not ignore the perception that this was a skanky mother with an equally skanky daughter, trying to find "a man". Too many times, while in the service, I saw my fellow soldiers get sucked into these "honey trap" situations. As soon as the poor guy was trapped in the relationship, with the hook firmly set, the woman/women inevitably began treating him like shit. As I read this story, I could almost smell the desperation pouring off the two female characters. "Jest keep him happy, girl. We's gotta git him thinkin' he don't wanna be nowheres else, and then we's is home free..."
Would like to read more about Melody, Melissa and any further adventures they have
so when will there be more of this one and do you know a mom and her daughter that you would live to do this with for real
You have made a great start with a really hot yarn. The idea of sex with a mother and daughter is good for many more stories involving hot FFM action. So keep 'em coming