All Comments on 'Mother in Law: A Bitch Broken'

To short. Hope the next chapter is longer and more detailed. Good premise.

I like the premise as well. Fucking the wife’s family is just really hot for some reason, and I really like how you play that up (e.g., the 8 inch cock that impregnated her daughter).

My only feedback would be to slow down some of the description. I think you adequately set the stage, but it does feel a bit minimal. Could use a bit more build up while still keeping it efficient and to the point.

Had he had the hots for her before despite how much of a bitch she’s been? Had he noticed her being stuck up in certain moments, but dressing scandalously in others? Getting inside their heads might improve how satisfying this premise is.

"To be continued"

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No chapter # in the title to warn this wasn't a complete story BEFORE opening it always earns an automatic rating of 1.

"... along with my sister in law(s)!!

NO!!

Either "SISTERS-IN-LAW" or "SISTER(S)-IN-LAW"!

4/5. Not having "chapter 1" in the title cost a star. Good start.

No notification that this is the first part, and barely a single page of text, makes this a 1-star by default

Thanks for all of those who commented and attempted to teach me something: I’m literally a brand new writer, this was my first story, apologies on the flimsy details. I know it’s shortest and isn’t a three page fap fest… apologies. :)

Just go ahead and read it twice if you all think you need to run over it again?? Lol I’ll work on it guys!! Thanks for all the feedback!!

I appreciate all the feedback. This is my first story so I am sure there are some issues… that being said, I look forward to growing in the community! Let me get back to thinking of how Joanne can better server her new master.

I am definitely looking forward to reading the continuation of this story. Nice job.

That's good use of a mil...nice read.keep up the good work.