All Comments on 'Mother's Day'

I'm ignoring the blatantly juvenile nature of the story because that's sometimes fun. Please proof your work, preferably having someone else give it a once-over. They're not as close to the piece and can be more objective. Just couldn't get into the story because of it.

I wasted 2 minutes on this! It's pretty obvious why you have none of those big red Hs next to any of your stories.

Spelling and grammar is so poor I can see why you spent 7 years in grammar school (traditionally 1-6th grade).

i am shocked that this actually got published. there was no thoughts left to imagine. sorry buddy this was a waste.

worse

Too short and not enough detail. Saying that you had a perfect scenario for a good story. I've not read the kind story you have produced, expand on it and you will have captured us.

Thought it was going to be an incest story on Mothers Day.

Keep writing.

REgards