by BlinkenLights93
Very well done! It would be great to see where they go in life together. Thank you!
Great storyline and build up. Ending was perfect.
Sexual build-up was so erotic.
This is a beatiful story
Doesn't need an extension
So glad none of the nonsense of a man coming 4 times in an hour and the woman turning in to a raving nymph available to almost anyone.
Good work.
He needs to put a ring on her finger and they exchange vows to live as man and wife. Of course a baby bump will follow. Keep writing, please!
I enjoyed the length of the story, the slow build-up of an erotic relationship and finally a sexual and loving partnership. Two lives with a brighter future. Super story-telling. Exciting and so erotic. Thank you.
Continue this great story include a pregnancy and possibly a threesome with Loren!!
The story will indeed continue, I want to make at least 3 parts.
Will you be my mom on Mother's Day? I want to be saying, oh mom, oh mom, oh mom, oh mom.
Loved it, a story of love and affection that tugs the heart. PLEASE continue
Your work is smooth and we'll edited. Keep it up. Be more descripted
XYZ
A thoroughly good story, I thought the epilogue could have done without the talk with Loren. Would loved to see more.
Awesome and please continue there was no incest but it was a real nice read 5 stars!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
He doesn't bother to even contact her for years, despite being old enough to do so without daddy's permission. Unless he didn't have a freakin phone. He decides to be a freeloader and goes to said person he has been ghosting all this time. First day at her house, she catches him jerking off. Second day she catches him again and this time sniffing her panties like a pervert. And she said she is proud of the man he turned out to be! Nothing more indicative of a confident and mature young man than being a jerk monkey panty sniffer who freeloads. Truly every woman's dream, what a catch.