All Comments on 'Move-In Day'

Loved the story development and pacing! Ready for part 2!

Hope to see a part 2, Love the pace this story took, Enjoyed the Characters. love to see this move in day turn into a first week. Pappasleaze!

Yo this is super hot!!

"Why don't you double check your room to make sure you aren't forgetting anything?" dad asked. "I'll see if your mother is ready to go.

Names should be capitalized. The word ‘dad’ was a name and should have been ‘Dad.’ The word ‘mother,’ when used like you did, was not a name and correctly was not capitalized.