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Jezalane over 6 years ago

Almost 5 stars

I really enjoyed this story. There was enough personalization to make us like the main character, you set up the moment nicely and the sex was HOT! In fact I'd say it's a 5 star story but for the spelling/grammar mistakes that jarred me out of the moment. Your story telling is first rate, please find an editor to help you reach your potential.

AD1996 over 6 years agoAuthor

Thanks!

Hi, Thanks for the really helpful input. Yes, I noticed a LOT of errors myself. I literally typed this in 20 mins of red-bull induced insomnia at 4am, so yeah. THANKS a LOT, I'll find some help. <3

Anonymousover 6 years ago

Hott AF!!!

Didn't even have to touch myself to Orgasm to this

Anonymousover 6 years ago

good story

Very interesting fun read. Keep going. What happens next? Does she do more public things?

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I analyze myself down to the last thread, recall the smallest glances, smiles, and words of those to whom I’d tried to be honest with, interpret everything in a bad light, laugh at my ridiculous attempts ‘to be like everyone else’ – and suddenly, in the midst of my laughing, t...

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