All Comments on 'Moving Closer and Closer'

Keep going, please. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

This story has great potential. Please do continue it.

Either the family is sexually free or changes need to be made. No 18 year ago le will walk around in front of little brother and family in panties and a too small shirt. No 18 year old has full size panties, let alone walk around wearing them for all to see. Daddy is to clueless but knows she is the love of his life....the rest Great and I like the playing on the couch

Keep it going

A good read but what next?

Absolutely continue. You've got a good start here (good enough that I made sure to log in to the site to rate & comment - I typically use the app which has stopped being able to do that for me). You've gotten some good feedback for polishing, I look forward to more.

Great start and i look forward to reading more, i can so see that happening

Keep it going

Please don't stop it

Good start and cliffhanger. Will there be a part 2

I certainly appreciate the support as well as the constructive criticism. I'll take all that into account with the next installment.

very erotic, like it, kept my interest

Let's assume this is just a gambit by Kim to get dad to follow her into the bathroom to apologize while she's cleaning up, and, well... her plan may soon reach its fruition

At least, that's how I'd see it going

Please continue. I'm pulsing with excitement from this and imaging my step father do this to me. I'm so hot.

I loved this story! Makes me wish my stepdad Rick was here right now. I've been teasing him for years now and have wanted him to give in like you did...in your "story".lol. nice story dad. I'm stacy18_bi at Hotmail if you want to hit me up!

...the place after she jacked him off for several minutes, as he rubbed, tickle-scratched and fondled her.....at her direction.

Nope.

No. Damn. Way. Is that ever gonna end like that.

She comes into his room sometime later, after her brother has obviously cashed out for the night and brings him to steel-hardness before sitting on his throbbing, generous-sized cock and pumping them both to earth shattering orgasms.

The relationship escalates over the next 7-8 months until she tearfully (but hopefully) reveals she's pregnant.

They've long since figured out what mumsie's up to with all her "visits" when she comes home and tells hubby he has to get tested for screwing around on her....but it turns out that he's clean and she's been fucking dozens of men and hubby hasn't had her in nearly a year.

Daddy and the kids let out a sigh deep with meaning and relief when mumsy turns up with advanced Syphilis and AIDS. And now she's home for good, fessing up to her whoring ways, as she prepares to leave them one last time.

I'm sure you can do better than this, but you will have to write it......

Thank you.

If you are going with a very inexperienced daughter then this is a great story.

Its really the beginning of an interesting story,, keep going

OMG...I love this story. Now I know what my Dad's thoughts were when he rubbed my back, while we watched TV when mom and my brother and sister were upstairs asleep. Reading this has made me so wet remembering how so excited I felt as he caressed my back, finally straying further to my budding young breasts, and my smooth young pussy. I have to read more and see where this goes!!!

I Liked where you were going but the ending is awful

I liked the way the story is going. Keep it going .