All Comments on 'Moving-In Day'

This had me chuckling, smiling and hard. Well done!

Good Tale! Enjoyable!

Well constructed story, lovely build up and enjoyed the squirt genre. if you do a second part which i think you should, could you explain if she is a 'real vag fluid girl' or just a bladder pusher as is seen so often and passed off incorrectly.

would like to hear more about her arse and what she wants you to do with it. if she is so wet with lady lube, what can she get inside her?

Really enjoyed

The story had me smiling and chuckling all the way through it! I saw the point/counterpoint of the conversation as soon as it developed. That particular item can be a thing of beauty when properly done, as yours was. That simple statement of her profession (lawyer) perfectly explained the type of agressiveness she showed. Even if other readers didn't pick up on that, they responded to it instinctively.

"Clue-by-four" is a very apt term. Very good! The story up to that point was a good definition of it.

I was a little worried at the beginning at what I thought as denseness on the part of the guy. I'm glad I was wrong. I mean, when a guy is afforded two different versions of a woman, and they do not match each other, a guy will respond appropriately, internally, and boyfriends be damned. A littl more there and I think that would have made the story a little more human, and even better. You did show off his will in the dialog; I just think that you needed to show more of what sets that off.

All in all, a great job!

While he was concerned about a boyfriend, she, apparently, was not so concerned about a wife or girlfriend, assuming that he would sleep (not sleep) with her and, take her to his home that night. A reverse double standard here? Nevertheless, a nice fantasy story, one, I am sure, that many guys have had. More please.

but 'taunt' means something entirely different to 'taut'.

... your spelling and story telling.

I lost count of how many times you left out words, meaning the I had to spend time trying to work out just what you were intending to say!!

Get an Editor and a Proof Reader!!

Could use a bit of editing - especially regarding word choice.

All in all an enjoyable tale.

Thx

Nice— but taut and taunt are two very different things.