All Comments on 'Moving On Ch. 02'

I don’t like one page chapters. Short chapters really break up the flow of the story. I suggest you add more pages and content to each chapter.

Still piecing this together with part one. I was expecting a continuation of Jeanne’s reconciliation. But I like the shift back to Coleen. She’s a real sociopath! I can’t remember the psychologist’s diagnosis that you used in part one, but simply put, she’s crazy, and that makes for a fascinating character study. Hurricane Colleen! I look forward to your damage reports from the wake of her destruction. I thought you were done after part 1, but now I’m looking forward to more. Thanks.*****

So you're meeting yourself at the apartment? Do you even proof read?