All Comments on 'Mrs. Blum is Taken'

why/d you start over in the mddle of the story??

You need to learn the proper use of semicolons and ellipses. They are not interchangeable with periods and commas and must be used very sparingly. Most of your semicolons should be periods.

Reading on, I'm pretty sure by your phrasing that your first language is not English. I suggest you find an editor to help you.

The story has a lot of potential, I would go back and re-write a lot of it to fill in where needs more back ground and character build up and plot line.

The story of convicts, family at home alone and domination are not new ones in here, you missed the mark here. Give it another go.

Cheers