by TrickydickyUK
Good story maybe a bit wordy, it might help being a little more discriptive of one another. ie. Grooming of nether regions and emotions of characters involved. (personal preference) maybe a bit more intimacy and warmth. I enjoy the premise
On your last/only story, your words, ... had to leave something for the next installment..
That was almost 3 years ago! Why make a promise you can't deliver on ... this leaves this story as incomplete.
You have potential, but without following through this gets 2 stars.
Good story. Enjoyed the plot development; however, the character development stopped. The romance, intimacy. sensual excitement did not materialize. That said, you wrote and had this story published!