All Comments on 'Ms. Dana Davidson Pt. 01'

Definitely needs a follow up or two

Great start to the story. I have a request: Spoken words should be in quotes" ". Thoughts should be in single ' ', or you can cheat and use italics. It gets confusing when your reader isn't sure whether the text is out loud or a thought until after reading the sentence and seeing 'he thought'.

That was good. Can't wait for Part 2.

Loved the story . It brought back memories of my youth and fantasies

Every young man's dream!!

A well told erotic story with an end which was milder and different from what I was hoping for at the beginning. Am hoping for a sequel as 53 over 24 is worth a bit of visual dreaming

Banal and boring

OMG !!! so hot..... love it ! slow burning but intensly erotic !! Congrats !

Some lame femdom thing happening with an ancient, soon to be dried up cunt from his childhood fantasies.

Too many “smirks”.

Story drags too much.