by martin_shecter1971
Premise still good.
Still lacks needed details. Too much going on. Needs to concentrate on fewer people's involvement/actions.
Four stars.
This was an excellent follow-up to the first one. Again, I love the subject of mutual masturbation. I thought this was well written, and loved the way the story developed, leading to the fantastic threesome ... I also liked the way you showed the boyfriend voyeuring for awhile in a different time sequence ... I came while reading it ... I'm certainly looking forward to the next one ... Quite and interesting little group!