by blndEE
Great story idea, but way to short. Stretch the tease part. Would like to have her babysit my 10 incher and see what moves she can put on it.
Great subject for the story. Your story started off well, and could have been great. You didn't extend it out enough, which made the story too brief. Good writing, try doing a little more into your next submission.
This story is cool.......but it cant end there......lets see what happens next.