All Comments on 'My Cheating Wife'

I got what I paid for. I paid nothing for this story. A sex scene is not a story. Sure every reader can imagine a beginning, middle and an end around this scene.

Where is the rest of the story?

You're sure going to piss as few folks off with the ending, but I liked it. Not every story is neatly wrapped. I am wondering when she will realize what she did... thanks for writing.

The tag reads 'consentual'. Really?

Finish your story

Good start but is incomplete.

I called my wife the wrong name in the middle of a good fuck. She froze for a minute and then continued as if nothing was wrong but, with less passion. I didn't realize that I had called the wrong name until after I had cum. things were "frosty" for a bit.

what??? Did you have a brain fart?

Not so much. It’s a short unfinished vignette. As written she has no idea what happened. The drama of the betrayal is… awol.

Good beginning. 🙂

Good short one

Sorry but this is far from finished

2* stars

Follow up?

I think he is going to pay Ken a little visit, maybe?

Huh?

Even a box cake demonstration would include the cooking and the tasting. Thanks for a very weak and incomplete effort.

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You realize that the wife might end up divorced without ever knowing what went wrong that night. And the husband might end up divorced without ever Knowing WHY his wife said that name, was thinking about her boss or someone else named Ken, and if she was fantasizing or reminiscing of an actual previous fuck. Apparently not important to the author. His call. Fail.

Sorry but I can't rate an unfinished flash story!

And then, and then, and then, .................

Story had promise but was never "flushed" out really ended. Anybody that was breathing could have made it a better read and FINISHED THE STORY

Come on man! This is too good of a beginning not to have an ending. Don’t leave us hanging.

Yeah, it's finished. It's a done deal. What follows is only natural: divorce. No need for elaboration. We all know how it go, the excuses, the tears, the crying, the threats, etc. But tragic it is...

5/5

The protagonist isn’t the only one with Blue Balls! Finish please.

1 star because the story's lacking any depth, especially!! after she calls out the wrong name. She didn't realize, however, he should've told her what's wrong, asked who's Ken, at least before walking out. If details, or lack thereof, aren't bad enough, the story's not finished. Nothing of the 'what happened then'. All around, a poor-assed story. Bob

It it obvious how the story goes from here

Well finished. What more is there to say? Ken stays in the house and our speaker leaves him there, where he belongs. Well done.

Ed

How in the world does a stupid tidbit like this get up to 3.9? This took about as much effort as sitting down. It's an insult to the reader. I gave it the score it deserved, 1.

Great short story! I would have loved more text at the end... More talking,... maybe a get together the following day...

One of the commentariot suggested it was a 750 Word story. Sure enough the beta page word count states 750. Now the author's approach makes some sense.

As suggested, it's good to tip the audience for the brevity of the story. I can think of four places to make this notedL 1) the story tag, 2) the title such as "My Cheating Wife - A 750 Word Story", 3) the story description, and 4) do an intro at the beginning of the story with a separator line such as <*> <*> <*> <*> <*> <*> <*> or ~~~~~~~ to signify the beginning of the story.

For what is there, it's pretty decent.

Hope that helps.

A great start, but didn't care for the end at all. Like, REALLY didn't care for it.

I liked the story but didn't like what's left out. How she & her boss got together & what happened after he left. But for the writing & overall story, caught between downgrading it with 2 stars, I gave it a 3.

Ignore all the people telling you to finish the story. If your other works are typical, no one needs more pathetic incel BTB juvenile wish fulfillment.

Is there another paragraph to this meek jumble of words??

pointless story

he just retreats? No wonder she's cheating, he's a fucking pussy.

That took a lot of talent. 2/5

Incomplete work. There needs to be more.

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AMerryman

Maybe the 1st paragraph of a story.

FTDS. No story here.

Where is th rest of the story

That's the preview now where's the actual story.

3 stars for this Part 1 of a story.

The rest could come if/when it's finished.

You need to say that this is Part 1.

I hope there's more. Dump the bitch. The Bear reserves judgment.

The BEAR

That moment when an author can't even spell a tag properly. Hint: consensual.

not a story

...on the way to Ken's...?

Mate, write a story, not an introduction.

Stopped at beginning of story don't like stories with no middle or end

No shit great man leave her the cheating bitch.

A decent start, but feels rather incomplete. Then I noticed that the word count is 750. For a 750 word challenge story, it's not bad. However, for a regular story, it's pretty abrupt and seems incomplete.

Without giving notice that it's more focused on the word count, you end up getting lower ratings and critical comments. Just some friendly advice for the next time...

I give the story 3 stars. My wife has said other guys name a few different times when I was having sex with her. She was just fantasizing so what's the big deal. I fantasize about other women all the time. I cannot believe someone would destroy a relationship over a spoken name in the heat of passion.

The ending fell off the face of a cliff.