All Comments on 'My Daughter The Slut Ch. 03'

Incredibly hot story. Can't wait for the next chapter.

One of the best i read in a long time!!!!!

keep up the good work & keep them comeing.

that was a great story wish it would have continued! its one of the best stories i've read so far! keep up the good work!and plssss come out with the rest soon.

:-)

would like to see more chapters from this series.

Good writing, I liked the way you didn't overdo it on the sexual parts. Definently looking forward to the next installment.

Ok. That was hot! I cant wait to read more!

i cant wait for chapter 4

Will there ever be a Chapter 4? or are you done?

Like thew action, but believe there is too much "talk" between the hot sex scenes.

Like though how it is developing, & hope the Dad gets to sample EACH OF THEM!-EATANDBEMERRY-69

great story,

really hot I guess no more chapters will come though and that's a shame

in any case I think it had a good balance of sex & talk

two things though :

-becky's slumber party that became an orgy: well I can understand that they sort of jumped everyone for their first cum, after that an all out share of everyone ? seemed a bit too much too quick to me. after the initial rush of excitation has passed (after everyone came once in essence) they could have felt awkward and leave it at that....

I mean it's not because you made love just next to people that you are gonna jump everyone happily ? ... anyway just my opinion on it

-don't use too much the "know it all" point of view like for example we don't need to know all the thoughts that goes through each character brain at any moment, sometimes you can drop tips that someone thinks something (example: dad looks at daughter while she masturbate) without going into the person brain and explain his thoughts & everything... in essence you can leave a little to mystery & readers imagination...

just little suggestions if you ever rewrite again.

great story in any case

... does she ever get to go to that prom with a date? And who will it be?

9862 WORDS PUSSY 57 TIMES

Amber had tried to join her in the shower, then Amber tried to feel her breasts (SHE NOT ONLY TRIED , SHE SUCCEEDED ON BOTH COUNTS!!!! READ WHAT YOU WROTE!!!! )

its (it’s) (5)

to (too) (5)

Becky relied nervously (replied)

worth while (worthwhile)

Amber’s necks (neck)

the quickest (quicker)

out down (outdone)

love making (lovemaking)

down stairs (downstairs)

topical print (tropical)

heart breaker (heartbreaker)

weights about 140 (weighs)

Black (black)

followed her backing (back)

flip flops (flip-flops)

half hour (half-hour)

Close (close)

bushing to their roots (blushing)

matter of fact (matter-of-fact)

amber (Amber)

retuning (returning)

Juls’ (Juls’s ) (2)

pulling on the lightly (them)

them self (themselves)

(CAN YOU SAY PUSSY????)touch HER PUSSY.”Julia just smiled and reached over to Tania and put her hand on her stomach, then slid it under her waistband and down towards HER PUSSY. Julia pushed her hand down through Tania’s small patch of pubic hair to HER PUSSY. As Julia’s hand came in contact with HER PUSSY Tania couldn’t help letting out a small moan. As Julia ran her hand up and down over TANIA’S PUSSY a few times she could feel her wetness, then as she pulled her hand out she let her middle finger dip partially into TANIA’S PUSSY causing her to moan a little louder this time. When she pulled her hand completely out of Tania’s pants Julia looked at it and saw her fingertips wet with Tania’s PUSSY juice and smiled. (131 WORDS 7 X PUSSY)

resigned herself to her fait (fate)

other (-Left) breast and took the (-other) nipple (OTHER LEFT BREAST???? WHAT ABOUT HER OTHER RIGHT BREAST????) (AFTER ALL WOMEN HAVE FOUR DON’T THEY????) (AT ONCE CARELESS AND NONSENSICAL!!!!)

it’s (its)

(STILL MORE PUSSY!!!!) HER PUSSY, she rubbed her hand down to the bottom of HER PUSSY and back up again. Christie continued to rub the outside of HER PUSSY a little longer before she pushed one, then two fingers inside HER PUSSY) (39 WORDS 4 X PUSSY)

discretely (discreetly)

(-the) permeated the room (that)

morning cartons (cartoons)

touchy feely (touchy-feely)

tended (to) cause

was all the way (wasn’t)

bikini addled (bikini-addled)

guided (-to) it into)

Jim rested his right hand on Julia’s hip while his right guided his cock (TWO RIGHT HANDS WILL BE USEFUL WITH HER FOUR BREASTS!!!!) (ASTOUNDINGLY OBLIVIOUS RO WHAT YOU WROTE!!!!)

him self (himself)

HARD AS HE COULD. Using her hips for leverage Jim fucked Julia as HARD AS HE COULD (17 WORDS HARD AS HE COULD = NEARLY HALF OF THE TOTAL) (REPETITIVE, REDUNDANT, AND B O R I N G!!!!) (IF THIS IS GOOD WRITING TO YOU, DON’T CHANGE A THING!!!!)

mind blowing (mind-blowing)

Barbeque (barbeque)

You have a GREAT start and can continue for at least a couple more episodes, esp if Jim knocks one or more of the girls up and the rest develop a lesbian harem...Jim could open a home for pregnant girls and lesbians kicked out by their parents.

please continue this story it is amazing

this story is so hot please write more my pussy is throbbing right now

MORE, PLEASE...