All Comments on 'My Daydream'

I loved reading your story! It was very exciting; especially since i was just discussing this very type of encounter with a friend of mine.

The story was easy to follow, and not too short or too long. Perfect :)

PH

few typos but then loads of stories here have those. Nice story idea. Could do with being finished or having a second chapter (maybe either finishing her off or adding another person to the mix) OTherwise a good start

"My Daydream - A girl looses herself in a daydream.

Submitted by CitrusBlossom (Mind Control) 09/12/11"

Quickest way to lose a reader is to have an error in the heading. The word is "loses".

A girl LOSES herself in a daydream.

No such word.......re-orientate.