All Comments on 'My Family with Money Problems'

I just couldn't get through it. The grammar and punctuation, or lack thereof, made it difficult to read. It was incredibly hard to follow the storyline, as it made no sense at times.

English is obviously not your 1st language but you might want an English language editor.

Read the first paragraph. Garbage

Only got about three or four paragraphs in and could not follow whatever you thought was a story line. While writing errotic literature, try to be quite brief about 'background' details.

As an example: my parents had helped . . .and my grandparents had . . . Now both were financially squeezed.

And, even that is long.

Sorry I cannot comment on your erotica, I just could not get to it.

I like the story but you need to clean up the grammer and punctuation. It was kinda hard to read.

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