All Comments on 'My Fantasy Becomes Reality'

very hot discovery story

you should turn on ratings - this would do well

thanks!

congratulations on submitting your first story. I know you are excited about people reading your work. But- you might consider telling your story more through dialogue than narration. Narration is fine but maybe should be separated by dialogue. If you are not sure what I mean, write to me and I will tell you.

Congrats again.

Jay Richards