All Comments on 'My fantasy with Michelle'

I really loved your story except that you should be more relaxed with your writing and not be so proper . I don't think many people speak the way you had them talk except perhaps in Africa .

Its stultifying, the dialogue is annoying, and frankly, you need to use an editor. use poetic license in what u are writing, because, how many people do u talk to that talk in complete sentences all the time?

You both are full of shit. That was a fucking great story. Keep up the great work.