All Comments on 'My Favorite Girl Pt. 01'

Great story so far, please continue with it.

great

And that's 14 Literotica pages, which translates to between 130 and 140 for Word. Fuck that shit.

eagerly waiting for the next chapter

Your writing is superb. Fantastic story, please keep it going. Want to see Jason kick that dudes ass a few more times. Why is Jason living with the Aunt & Uncle if he is a multi-millionaire?????

Brilliant, I could feel the intensity of their passion thru out the story. Please, More.

Fantastic, would be so romantic if they found they could not be without each other and decided to become a couple and find somewhere like australia where cousins can marry.

the plot or the character development didn't need the 14 pages, a death to push the story's development but there wasn't anything to justify it. It was just golf for half the story. The started out with cousins teasing each other sexually with no significant description to how it led to it. Then ton of Golf and sex. I've read a lot of stories with 10+pages but this wasn't even half good. You're a quality writer but the character development could've been a lot better. Don't really know you care about that as I don't think you will post more stories any soon. But this is my feedback. Thankyou for posting this well-written story.

More please

I need the second part. This has to be one of the best stories I've ever read.

I loved it and look forward to future chapters.

As you mentioned up front, you've "been away" for a while, so this is my first read of one of your stories. Goes without saying, outstanding quality and content! Disagree with complaints on character development, to truly understand an incestuous relationship you have to understand the history of the couple, their interaction over time leading to stepping to the next level, and how the lure of illicit sex combines with love. To treat the subject with the respect it deserves, the author here does and excellent job. I get some read this genre for "quick relief" but this site is as much literature (by the better writers) as it is erotica. 5* and look forward to the next part...

A great story...all 14 pages. It's well written and I really enjoyed the humor and humor is rare is stories like this. Thanks

Loved the story. Want numby2.

I do not know what the person who said "development" was an issue is complaining about.. I believe they were just looking for the sex. The way you detailed the constant teasing by both was great. This story is similar to how my cousin and a relative of hers on her father's side hooked up. He would stay at her house when his father and mother would have issues. So I understand the back and forth from the way she told me the story. I hope there is more. It seems to me the father/uncle can sense what is going on and is trying to stop it LOL. Great writing!

First cousin marriage is legal in two-thirds of the South, including Florida. It was widely practiced until a hundred years ago. One reason for its popularity is it kept families from drifting apart, and if there was a family business, it was a guaranteed job and possible share of the inheritance. Legal incest.

Like the story.

Excellent story so far!!

Your writing has definitely improved quite a bit over your earlier works, so kudos for that.

I am feeling a lot of similarities between this story and 'That Summer' in terms of how things are starting. The idea that things between Emma and Jason is just 'no strings, just for this trip' is the same arrangement that Derek and Jessica had, so I am hoping that this one goes in a different direction and doesn't just end up as a rehash.

A couple of specific points about the story:

It's "roleplay" not "roll play".

Also, Jason cuming in Emma after she said not to was pretty fucked up. That shows a complete lack of respect for her wishes and breaks the rule of "no means no". That's not "pushing the boundaries" like trying to edge her shorts up to show off a little more skin, that's flat out she said no and he did it anyway. The "I thought you were joking" line makes it even worse. Getting someone pregnant is not a fucking joke.

All character's involved in sexual activity are 18 or older.* Is this required by Literotica or do you feel compelled to warn potential readers that there may be an unrealistic depiction of the ages at which real teens engage in sexual activities.

Excellent story so far⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

EPIC !

Great start, I hope the rest is as good.

Rapier

Good story. I have to admit, I was hoping to hear more about Dory and how her knees get sandy.

4 stars, because I did not particularly like the way the story portrayed his view of Emma. Too many hints at not respecting her and forgetting her person.

Other than that, I was an okay story.

The whole thing was great except the attempt at anal. Come on, no prep? Of course he didn’t fit