by First_time_bi
Very hot story but,with a lag time of two months between installments in this sequel, it tends to leave me cold.
I like the way your write. I enjoy good dialogue and seeing characters discover something or grow somehow. You've got that going. There seems to be a well developed scene in which Miss Rebecca lives, and that bodes well for future chapters.
The suggestion I offer is to let your chapters get a bit longer. I think Ch. 01 and Ch. 02 would make a good chapter.
You have a pretty good story going here. It would be enjoyable to see it progress.
Make the chapters longer, and continue the series. Very erotic story.
An excellent two chapters that deserve to be followed up. Thank you.