All Comments on 'My Girlfriend's Brother'

More please!!

Strange way to end it, especially since he was raped. But everyone involved has the maturity of a tweet, so a pillow bop shouldn’t surprise me.

Ben is a stalker and a rapist. This is not love.

This started out okay, but it got really rapey and that sort of creeped me out...

That was definitely non consensual

I actually liked the build up between the two and the sexual tension too, but I actually hated the the setting for the sex and how it all went down. Ben can't tell him earlier on he loves him just to rape him later on knowing damn well he wasn't in the right state of mind for that. The last part of the story ruined it for me.

Will add a message at the beginning to warn readers this has a non consensual theme.

Tonwand x

I am seeing many more stories like this violent crap lately.

Are people that pissed off now that they have to write stories with this kind of abuse as the plot line?

Can only attribute this to the current state of affairs in the United States.

This was a waste of time of hoping something that started off with a sorta good premise, would turn out, if not good, at least ok!! It didn't, this was NOT a good read...better luck on your next endeavors.

But I finally finished it. Now I'm sorry I did. I don't want to complain about any technical aspects of your writing, that was just great. Spelling, sentence structure, grammar were all just great. I just feel the need to go take a shower now.

but it wasn't that good of a story. I really tried to get into it but it wasn't good at all. like it started off alright but then as the story progressed it started to go downhill. better luck next time.

Personally, I like the twisted and sick nature of dark romance where you have one character taking the other by force or forcing them into having a relationship but ultimately their feeling of mutual love prevails in the end. I hope you will continue with your story and the characters will come to term with their attraction. The only thing I don't like about your story is the end where one of the character is not feeling pleasure at all, despite being force because the other character Ben loves him so he should make sure his partner feels good too. This ties to the second problem I also didn't like how short and less descriptive of the noncon sex at the end because it felt like you rushed it. The truth is I feel cheated I have to read to page three getting through all the other texts so that I can get to the erotic part only to have that scene felt flat. The girlfriend and friends should only be mention in passing and the main focus should be the noncon sex scenes between the MCs since this is an erotica so that scene alone should take at least a page and and half with very detail descriptions. What I get is a dry non stimulating anal sex with some oral and an off scene or fade to black. Perhaps, you will do much better next time and happy writi

Just a terrible story. I particularly did not like the rape scene. Just don’t need that kind of thing. Started out good but went downhill from there. Please no more!

Wow this is really good. Needs work, for sure.... but you have a diamond in the rough my friend.

I love this, but this can't be all of it.

This was good until the rape scene!!!!!!