All Comments on 'My Husband's Business Partner Ch. 01'

by yekollu

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Great development

Your character and plot development are terrific! I look forward to reading more. Much thanks!

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
yekollu.

yekollu. go ahead.

dont care about the comments.

i am with you. we need indain writer. this is a good start and i hope you will be a great writer in few months.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
English Butchered Beautifully

Gave you 25% for taking the time to write this. But it is really unreadable due to the intolerable amount of grammar problems. You should really learn the language before you try to write it

digdaddyrichdigdaddyrichover 14 years ago
The story seemed to drag a little

A lot of repetition to the story, going over things that were already explained, But all in all it's a good start of a series. I hope that the next chapter moves along to the goal of her getting fucked by her lover.

FunseeeekrrFunseeeekrrover 14 years ago
Due to the improper use

of the language, I didn't get much past the 3rd paragraph.

Literotican should have rejected this story simply because of that.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
ugh

ugh

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Sex amoung the unwashed

Really, who cares.

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