by Lancer1
Enjoyed the story very much and I hope that you continue submitting this type of story. Thanks!
This is a tremendous read, the sex was excellent, the mental side of both parties shows how the power game is played. Not just abuse and torture. The real games are played in the mind. I very much look forward to continuing chapters of this couple or new stories by Lancer.
Wow!!!!!!!
Great job with this, good writing on both parts, the mental side as the sex side. The only thing I did not like was it was a little to long and should have been broken up in to more parts. 8 pages is a hard read to some. Am going to read your second part now.
I am reading Part 3 right now but wanted to stop and let you know how much I appreciated your quality writing.
I have a simple 40C and know a gentleman that really wish I could lactate for him but never really got all the possibilities and interest in that particular kink until I started with your story.
I like how well you put everything in a logical evolution of the mind frame and the removal of limits as the protagonists learn to trust and love each other.
Excellent work! I hope we will get more opportunities to read your work.
God, if only i could find a woman like that i'd be in heaven. I just loved the story. i don't agree with the others who said it was too long. i think it was perfect the way it was. On to read part 2 now.
This is one of best stories I have read on here. I like how they both agreed how things should be. Without using force to get what he wanted and what she wanted as well. Keep up the good work sir, you are a great writer, you have made my day thank you very much
you have weaved quite the erotic tale, which is actually full of romance as well. i enjoy D/s stories with discipline and bondage. i have been drawn into this relationship of jack and melinda, i breathlessly wait to see what happens next. you did a good job proof reading, your work has a professional feel to it. again, thanks, G
Wow!!
I have no word to explain how good this story was.
The length is perfect, keeps you wondering where it will go.
Keep up the good work, and like the others, I am going to part 2 now...
Thank you!
I loved these stories,(just happened to be here at #1 when I wanted to comment).
They are great, right length, good characters. Only one rather bitchy remark. If you never again used the word,"lush" in relation to her tits, I doubt the world would complain, and I am fan of "lush tits"
Greg
Stilted language and repetitive phrases. I actually giggled a few times at some of the dialogue. The "sole of discurtion"? Please find an editor to assist you.
The best story I have ever read I really want the continuation of this story bravo
Never really knew about people having a "lactation slave" gotta admit its pretty fricken hot! This story definitely made my panties wet! ;) well done!!!!
i loved this story. it is my dream to be a lactation slut. this story was right out of my deepest fantasies. more. more. more.
Absolutely awesome. This is one of the best written stories I've read in some time.
Thank you for sharing with us.
I loved it and came sooo hard. I would love to be Melinda. Please write more.
I couldn't put it down from beginning to end!! I have such a fantasy of being a milk cow and owned. My tits r huge and I love them played with and fondled. I wish to lactate so bad!! This story gives me hope of finding someone with my same interests. I can't wait to read more!! Good job!!
It is my wish to become a lactation slave like Melinda. I need to be controlled. That milking station is a total wet dream for me. I wish I could find a dom like Jack.
I have ever read. As a domme, I have have many women and men under my control but have never thought about the entire situation as deeply as you have. thank you for the information and insight. I will be much better to those wonderful women who find pleasure in this.
I have always been fascinated with the bdsm world and it is my secret wish to become a part of it. I am a submissive in bed and love to have my tits played with and disciplined. I would love to start lactating them. I would love to be Melinda and be milked and disciplined like her. However, unfortunately my circumstances currently do not allow me that lifestyle as of yet. For now it is my fantasy and deepest wish
Said that cause it should always be said when true and it is true.
The primary motivation for this comment is there are frames showing that I assume should contain images. They do not open when I open the file.
Don't recall them. Are they newish? If they are supposed to be there, does anyone have ideas on what might make them open?
Please, I beg of you, for the sake of your readers, find an editor! This could be a compelling story if it were not so predictable and did not employ sophmoric sexual terms and phrases. You have a gift for writing. Please polish it before you present it to the public. It is so distracting to have to stifle the urge to laugh while reading erotica.
Just love the submissive nature of Melinda. The dressing of the story with the lactation makes it different to read too... Looking forward to future installments
I come back to this erotic work of art repeatedly. This is my ultimate fantasy. I would love to be confined in the milking station and abused and anally fucked just like Melinda.
Some minor typos,etc but don't distract from an erotic yarn. Looks like true love mingled with some fairly serious bdsm. Hope it stays that way.
in a world full of pathetic women who have lost their beauty and ability to please their men... it is so wonderful to read of a women enjoying her true essense as a submissive to a man who enjoys milking her and dominating her with love ... i simply love men who suckle nipples of any age, it's the initial turn on and then there is the clitoral orgasm ... loved this work ... bravo ... write more along these lines