All Comments on 'My Lord My Prince Ch. 01'

Ohh i'm loving the potential this story has! Please don't make us wait as long for a next story, i miss them when they are gone :P Cheers :D

loved it; loved the uncertainty, the innocence of the prince, and damn, the sexual tension between these two jumps off the page. And whoo boy, the potential for trouble is just waiting to explode. And I'm glad you didn't rush into a sex scene in this chapter... the anticipation of what's building between them is as hot as it is sweet. Well done :)

Wonderful story. I can't wait for the next chapter!! Please hurry. Could you make their relationship an exclusive one?

I love the build up of the characters.....totally cool! It's killing me to know what Asgar is though? Is he a warrior prince maybe?

The chemistry just sizzles between them and love the uncertainty of both of them. This story is just really cool! I can't wait for the next chapter.

Cheers! (:

....needs some serious editing. Like the storyline and sexual tension loads! Keep it up but maybe take some more time before posting the next one!!

Love your stories. The uncertainty of Asgar's past makes for a great read. Like it a lot. Now if you can just post something about The discovery, I'll love you even more...:)

I am absolutely enthralled!! I so hope there will be more.. Soon.

I'm hooked on *both* your stories! You'd better start cranking.

I'm totally intrigued by the possibilities you've set up here. Palace intrigue! Mother/son issues! Sibling issues! Sub/dom issues! Amnesia issues! Have fun with it all.

As to the person who said you need serious editing -- you need editing, sure, but not serious. I read lots of writers on this site and you need moderate editing, not an overhauling of your work. Just keep the plot points straight in your mind, remember character development (I don't remember getting a full physical description of the Asgar, btw -- just big with green eyes) and get a proofreader. Now bring it!

I am definetly hooked on both of your stories!!! I love the attraction and the tension. I'm dying to read more!!!

I usually skip new stories until older ones are finished. Just my weird rule, but I am enjoying your new work. So post what you want, I'm gonna read it.

I honestly couldn't get through the whole story because I couldn't get past your horrible grammar. Get someone to edit your work please. Your run-on sentences are atrocious.

I thoroughly enjoyed it and I did not think your grammar was as atrocious as anonymous did :) please continue and know you have gained a new fan

PLEASE write more!!

But the Prince.... is he Hammond or Hammand? cos u keep using both. lovely story so far. when r u gonna complete the other one..... The Discovery: Prison Inmates.

I love your stories they are the only ones i have ever sent feedback,god I love them,keep up the brilliant writing.Please do not keep us waiting too long for the next chapters. you know are the best.

That was amazing!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm in love with it so far....please continue writing...SOON

Omg that was a great beginning pdlease do keep writing!!!!

For more. Please continue.....Your eager fans await.

I really like where you are going with this story. I cant wait for the next chapter. Is there anything coming out soon?

I really hope the slave turns out to be royalty.

you need to keep writing on this story i also love the other one keep writing on both please!!!!

LOVED IT!!! so you need to continue this. the slave has got to be royalty....=)

This is about the third time i've repeatedly read your story and i'm practically scratching the walls in need for the next chapter!

Please leave your other story and come back to this one, we are all in-love with it and need our dosage ASAP!

You're an amazing writer.

Your's truly,

Desperate for more reader

WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK? why am i not reading chapter two at this very moment? fix this situation darling at fucking once.

-sincerly 9

This is also my thrid time reading and I cant get enough of it I really hope you write more soon, very soon. I check your page everyday in hope that the next chapter will be there. Cant wait to see what happens next. PLEASE HURRY :p :)

what an awesome story... you have a real gift :) I'll be eagerly checking to see when you'll add the next chapter!!!

So much time passed between the 2nd and 3rd chapters I had to go back and read again. I love this story.

It was delightful reacquainting myself with your work. Glad you decided to continue this piece.

The beggining of a story is the most crucial part. The best story ever written, the bible, starts with three words: In the beginning. It's a hook, a catch, and something that makes you want to read the rest of the fiction. Unlike this story. The first sentence, the first line, is as boring as watching soap dry.

The word "okay" is not okay in most fantasy/historical settings. It's a relatively recent (mid 19th-century) American word that pulls the reader right out of the world you are trying to evoke. You have created a highly intriguing setup here: the instant connection between two men, hampered by one's innocence, the other's amnesia, their unequal social status, and the implicit dangers of palace politics. Don't let too-casual diction break that spell.

wow, some harsh anonymous critics in the comments section. I really enjoyed the story. It moves slow enough to allow you to get to know the characters and enjoy their interactions with each other.

I hope I get to see more from you in the future!

I found much here to enjoy, the imaginative setting, believable characters (even is the "little prince" was a little too mincing for my tastes), and an intriguing setup, plus much good humor. However, it is slow-going. You can convey a slowly developing relationship without dragging your reader through every hesitated pause and unspoken impulse. I would have suggested introducing more characters (where's the mother?) and more of that palace intrigue.

The varying cganges of narration is confusing. Personal, yet omnicent. This conflict caused me moderate confusion.

The prince is 5'2" and the slave is "more than double his height", so that makes him over 10'4"?

Sorry. i wasn't voting my hand slipped