All Comments on 'My Mil Takes My Wife’s Place - 01'

Really liked the story, but you need to get someone to proof read for grammar. Great start though

Good start 👌

Very slow start but you saved the story at the end,

felt real. Liked it a lot.

I realize English is probably your third or fourth language. Most American's do not understand this and will tend to put negative comments because of the errors in writing.

I would like to recommend writing the story chapter in French or Vietnamese and have some tool translate it for you. Then read it again. Or you could have someone review what you have written in English and have someone you know proof read for you.

I would volunteer but that would be a disaster. Even though English is my first language my writing is 100 time worse than yours. Anyone reading my reviewed story would on be confused and then the would write really bad comments.

I enjoyed reading your story as written/published. I understood the cultural differences and really like the way you expressed yourself.

Continue to write.

Need to have the wife come back and is ok with

Mom and all three have a relationship ever after