All Comments on 'My Mission from Mia: Ch. 01'

Great start, I like where this could go. More please.

Looking forward to chapter 2

The writing was good, with very little repeating parts. The conclusion begs for other chapters. Well done for a first story.

I like where this is going. You quickly explained the plot twist at the end, obviously setting up for the next story. Well written and edited.

Nice, good for a first story. Thank you.

Now, why are we waiting? Because a different avenue was opened, and fresh meat is in demand.

Great start with a strange ending. Hope he gets to his own sister soon. Also be nice if a lil more maledom. Even better if he starts breeding the four.

really enjoyed this story can't wait for more

Very good, but some parts seem to shift from past tense to present tense at random. But other than a few tenses needing to be changed this entire story so far is great

for me it was great until the fantasy part showed up at the end, before that it was 5/5 but with the fantasy dropped to 3/5 and the only chapter i will read. which is to bad as you did a great job. but not for me. thank you for sharing your talent