by shadowrnr
Great story. I would have enjoyed it more thoroughly if you had had someone proofread it and correct your poor grammar.
I see that you posted the same story a second time, but did not continue this story!
Do you plan to add chapters?
My mother in law is 69 and she loves sex. She's slightly heavy but has nice long tits and a really furry pussy. Her husband is retired from a local hospital bbSo it has become harder to get her alone. My wife is very nice looking but her mother is the best lay I have ever had.
You have a winning story here, and you are a good storyteller, but you need work on your writing craft. Somehow your style seems lacking. One thing I can see is the long paragraphs. For some reason, what is good paragraph length in print, becomes a problem when read off a monitor--it's just a fact of life, so shorten them. Also try working in more dialogue in the next chapter--it'll greatly improve the finished product.
Good Luck! cd
My daughters MIL was some 20 years older than me and discovered she worked with me so it was very easy to start an affair which lasted 7 years, right up to 2 hours before she passed away. I don't think anyone else knew about it