All Comments on 'My Naga King Ending'

This chapter... I just... What? I've read some weird books, watched some weird movies, but this is nigh incomprehensible; it doesn't really fit with most of the rest of the story. I liked it at first, it was a great story, but... wow. I hope you do end up doing an alternate ending though. Good work overall. Keep it up.

It was okay until this chapter. What a travesty

I liked it. Good story kinda hard to follow but good

Such a good series until... this chapter. I'll forgive you if you remove this chapter and repost a BETTER chapter within the next 6 months. Until then this was crap and you should bad. Much apologies for being rude, but what can I say it was crap.

I absolutely loved this story until the last two chapters but don't give up and even if you don't redo the final part as you stated you might I gave you some stars for finishing this story and have given you top marks in previous chapters,so keep writing!.

Still hope you don't do this to Angel of Mine and A Demon...or two just for me, as they are also awesome tales and would hate to see it happen then.

1) You could have explained how she went from having her ex taking her into another room to waking with her 'mom' who is also not what she seemed,or what happened to her ex.

2) If Zelo gave her real parents his venom he must have known what would happen,you could have explained a bit more about his motives behind that.

3) You could have had less plot twists as it got to confusing at the end.

4) You could have shown what was happening at the castle while she was being held,like how Tobias might have sensed a difference between his real mother and this fake one when she didn't remember she was supposed to go on a day trip with her mother-inlaw. Or that Zelo noticed the difference in her behaviour, and him talking to her dad to find out what was going on.

5) You could have told of the capture and demise of his fake mate.

6) You could have shown her returned to her mate instead of having her telling one of her many children the story years later.

These are but a few things that you could have done.

You should have just stopped at the end of chapter 6 and taken an indefinite amount of time off instead of forcing the last two chapters. You do yourself and your readers such a huge disservice by your actions. Please seriously consider removing the last two chapters, take a few months off and revisit this story when you can give it the justice (as well as time and effort) it rightfully deserves. You know you're better than the way you concluded this story, so please have a little pride in yourself. As it is, this last chapter isn't even worth rating.

I'm confused

I feel like these last two chapters were rushed and arent anywhere near what you can truly do. It feels almost like the whole story was just rolled up and shoved down the readers throat. Honestly you need to just go back and hash the scenes out more and explain whats happening during the time intervals instead of speeding through all of it. For the time being you reallly should just take these last two chapters down. You have your direction and plot down now make it substantial. Something that we the reader can really sink ourselves into. Thank you for bring us your story and all the work you have put into but please show us your true skill and bring the story back to life and up to the standard of the rest of it.

I hoped that this chapter would clarify the last one. It just confused me further. I am really disappointed. Please take your time with your other stories so that this travesty doesn't happen again.

So confused

Ok so I have to say I'm a little bit confused. BUT this is YOUR story and ultimately what you write goes. Yes this could have been a little bit more well written, there were a lot of really good twists, some really dumb decisions, and I had actually thought I knew what was going to happen in the end, so happy to say I was completly wrong. You made this story stand out, and for that you are remarkable.

I liked the way it ended. 5 stars.

Huh...?

Disappointed. Not what I was expecting but still a good read none the less. Thanks for an enjoyable story.

Who's her father? Or did I miss that bit?

I really liked the story plot but I ended up getting confused and lost as the story progressed especially the last two chapters.

i enjoyed it but the last 2 or 3 chapters confused me

I loved it. After reading the last chapter it made me want to read more. Such great characters and a good plot. I hope there is more to the story.

I think you should do a q & a with your characters. I think it would be a better way at getting to know them.

Great story. Cool ending.