All Comments on 'My Neighbor and My Pool Pt. 01'

I gave a five for a wonderful best first effort. But a few pointers:

1. This is not an anatomy lesson. You don’t need to be so medical in description.

2. Nobody talks like that! Even I, with advanced degrees in Classical Literature and Shakespeare wouldn’t dare utter such purple prose!

But a great first effort! Keep them coming, and this one could EASILY become a series on the education of Luna (and her friends).

Real Nice one . . . But I will go with what

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=2160011 said here . . .

Nice pacing, good backstory. Also, too many authors rush the ending of a story. You made a classy ending.

Wow...

I gave a five stars 🌟

I loved it 😍 & Even I want a neighbor like u😍

I liked the story but no one says “Dear Lover” etc.

Great story in so many ways. BTW, people do day "dear lover"!

Only real nag: her friend Sarah suddenly became Sally at the end of the story!

"You, my lovely neighbor, are a sexy rock star."

Unless she's actually in a band playing rock music, she's not a rock star.

good story, language too gushy and pretentious

Great sexual plot, but the conversations between the lovers was unbelievable. No one talks like that.

Great story, but the language between them was atrocious. No one has conversations using those type of words. The language made it hard to read the story all the way through. The conversations were very off putting and definitely made the stor unbelievable.

average ... the dialogue was juvenile and excessive ... not erotic and no sense of buildup

The language used here, I agree with some of the comments...yet...Gutless MotherF______s...gotta hide behind anonymous commenting...

This is a new and, apparently relatively inexperienced, author, if (4) stories are all you have done. A modicum of understanding is necessary, and some kindness...

Five**5**Stars...if for no other reason than to encourage you to "Do Better!!" with your future endeavors. 🌌🌌🌌🌌🌌

Could have been a good story except for the schlocky juvenile dialogue ... What are you ... In grade school, pretending to have pubic hair??!!