All Comments on 'My New Family Ch. 01'

A good stsrt with interesting potential

Really enjoyed the story. I’ll be on the lookout for a sequel. 5**

Love your story. Hope to see Chapter 2 soon!

Liked it lots.. Great start to a very good story, can't wait for chapter 2

Papa Bear

great story

amy knowing that she was going to have sex with Michael never needed the pill

and was at her most fertile time of the month did not try to stop him from coming in her tried in a sence but was to late could have got off him the second time but did not

also Michael 's father had a visecthomy

would love to see the story take this turn

I enjoyed that a lot!

Hi...I come home...mom is getting a divorce...she is now gay...but we have sex with her lesbian (not???) lover. The end. How about at least some attempt at developing a story.

I KNOW Michael's mother is in her mid-fourtys but I would love tò see both women become impregnated bý Michael multiple times! And no other men or women!

This story deserves more chapters. Gotta make it a long one. Eagerly waiting for next part

Let Michael begin giving orders to the women. Every morning, he must be woken up with a blowjob. At home, he will fuck any holes of either women whenever he wants, and they are not allowed to resist.

In the house, the women must only wear sexy lingerie and high heels. In public, the women must wear tight and revealing clothes.

Slowly, both the women began to enjoy taking orders from Michael. They realized that they were born to be submissive, and they needed a Master to dominate them sexually.

Eventually, they begged Michael to accept them as his sluts. They promised to do anything to satisfy Michael's sexual needs. In return, Michael is allowed to do anything he wanted to both their bodies, including decorating them with tattoos and piercings. He is also allowed to fuck other women apart from both of them.

I love this story and can't wait to chapter 2. Keep going on these lines.

Thank you all for the kind comments. Chapter 2 has already been submitted and should be published in the next few days. There will definitely be a chapter 3, no spoilers

I've awarded four stars for what is a stirring and essentially well-thought-out story. It would have been five stars if it hadn't been written in FoneText. Words like 'gonna' 'cause' and 'wanna' don't belong in a well-crafted story; the exception being an occasional use in a less than literate character's vocalisation.

I know that the English language is going through a period of dumbing down at the moment but, thankfully, we haven't yet arrived at the point where words like cause -- an abreviation of 'because' that is usually written,'cause -- have attained acceptance by publishers (with the exceptions noted).

If you want your writing to be taken seriously, learn to write in the language demanded by audiences.

Thoroughly enjoyed your story and can't wait for the rest of it to be published.

Mom discovered her latent desires for son and women out of frustration. More women should concede to their true feelings.

Excellent story. Can’t wait for the next chapters.

Very nice and a wild ride. I be interested to see where this goes.

You need an editor. Bad.

But a sexy story, waiting for anal.

Good story, well written. Only negative is that it's a bit mean, as you very well could fool some young readers that they can get laid by signalling feminism and political correctness. It's nice in a story but should never be tried in real life (the incest fantasy disregarded).

Story sped up after first sex scene, felt as if you were trying to finish rather than tell any story. And yeah, get an editor as there were too many mistakes.

rough in a few parts, but overall nicely done. looking forward to the next chapter

Great storyline. I certain hope there’s a lot more chapters too cum... ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

One thing that might be a tad offensive to some people: you have mistaken being gay/lesbian with bisexual. That's a general remark, not a personal one.