All Comments on 'My Once Friend'

Now let him fuck peters mom that’s what needs to happen

Son is a pathetic wimp. He could have stopped it. 1*

Chapter 2? Was it one time event or will Peter come back for more?

Nothing incest, just a voyeur cuck, the lack of english is the least of your problem.

You have potential, but I suggest you download "Grammarly." It will correct your grammar and punctuation, making your work more readable and less confusing.

You might also cut back on the repetitive capitalised words. NOBODY carries on like that when they are fucking or being fucked. It's unrealistic and it detracts from the enjoyment of the story. YOU may like writing it like that, but most readers don't like reading it.

Don't give up, you'll learn as you go.

learn English...this was terrible

Next is mom does Peter in front of him and he joins for a dp.

good story.

For 1 no real friend would do that 2 no son would stand for it 3 this isn't a incest story 4 you copied this from countless others its not a original story and it's unrealistic it's a trash story about a piece of shit mom a piece of shit friend and piece of shit son I give it 1 star only cause there isn't a lower star to give

Really that the end and 2 where was the incest