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by justalittlefantasy

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andyMassageandyMassageover 4 years ago
interesting start

Looking forward to this being continued.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
not bad story

This isn't a bad story, actually a nice premise and plot. Just lacks details and a build up.

justalittlefantasyjustalittlefantasyover 4 years agoAuthor
Agree with your comment

It does lack build up and character development. It's my first erotic story and I was anxious to post it. I will do better as I learn, I hope. Thank you for the comment.

AG_CarringtonAG_Carringtonover 4 years ago
Keep Going

As you’ve noted, this is your first story. I see a lot of promise in your writing and you’ve indicated you take constructive criticism well. I hope you keep writing and look forward to your growth as an author. There were some very good things here.

Busman19639Busman196396 months ago

This is just a warm up I hope. This ‘beginning’ has a lot of potential.

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Hi! I have been writing a family blog for a little over a year but discovered the words flow more freely when I write erotica. I just wrote my first two stories and wanted to share them here for feedback. An adult website is my goal, but I am not sure yet how to arrange it. ...