by RealDoc
It's a great story line. But please, improve the writing. ("loose" vs "lose"; "there" vs "their"; and champagne!!!) Buy a dictionary, and use it! I don't have to read things out loud, I don't even have to move my lips when reading! And words have meanings! Make correct choices, and avoid having readers need to pause to make sense of what you have written. It's a nicely done plot, and otherwise well written. Fix these errors, and keep that imagination running.
-- KK in Texas
<p>This kind of story, told in such a melodramatic style and with such an over the top revenge aspect, is no better than the horrible cuckold stories that share this site.</p>
<p>The whole story lacked HEART and passion. How can a story of infidelity and seduction be so devoid of emotion? For example, the exchange between the husband and wife was not just minimal, it was totally unbelievable. There is no emotion, no outrage, no remorse...nothing. If Sherrie were SO EASILY seduced by this doctor then she was worthless too.</p>
<p>I was very disappointed with the entire tale. It was difficult to read it through to the end.</p>
Thoroughly original and a tad macabre, but good imagination. Loved the camaraderie amongst the wronged co-conspirators.
I like your stories.
Thank you for your time and effort.
By the way, please ignore detractors' comments - this is all imagination and you are perfectly right to present your creations as you wish.
Please keep up the good work.
Silly story with several gaping holes. And, by the way, the drink is Champagne. The city is Champaign.
Good tale of revenge, but completely unbelievable. A fair read though. A change from some of the other revenge stories
as long as you don pick at it. What would be
was kind of obvious from the beginning. Better than a lot of
things but nothing exciting. I least no wimps appeared in
the story or is someone going to demand a big punishment for
Sherrie?
So we have a plastic surgeon in Harold who can like all reconstructive surgeries simply create a new cock in sex change operations, but that never comes to mind of the Real Doc, no more than minimal bleeding when you cut off a wanker is impossible. Most people bleed to death and if you don't know that ask the torture victims of Vietnamese Cong.
This was outlandishly stupid in scope and making a slut wife a victim. Doc Harold banged her he said repeatedly, so I guess the other times were just rapes too by the willing.
As a cop always knows, stories always unravel and that many whiners being mounted by a cock would have sung and you would be in prison and the slut would be mounting some suit lawyer trying to get you off.
What an utter disappointment this was.
So what - this was far better than most and had the consequential appeal of justice missing in so many others.<P>
Author, I like your imagination and subject which manages a usually fair ending - thusly satisfies more than many. Just continue the challenging effort to grow<P>
I look forward to your next tale of imaginative consequence.<P>
With High Regard
understand why harold didnt just become a woman ...then he could have fucked the hubbys of all the women he fucked ...he could have had a lifetime of then just being fucked instead of fucking.....oh well maybe the doc is right he did learn to like it up the ass instead
The sacrificial penis was indeed sacrificed in a surreal session (how did they get rid of the...never mind!). It was done to erase the sins of all the cheaters with bad concisions and for the benefit of the soft hearted and mind husband. Sorry, but the effeminate character of the husband could not convince me with his wimpish approach to his cheating and lying Sherrie (until it became virtually impossible to continue with the lying). The whole story looks like one bog exercise in self distraction and avoidance. Instead of dealing with their real problem, namely –why did Dear Sherrie cheat on him to begin with, or how come the husband’s mind accepts dear Sherrie’s terrible excuse (if dear Sherrie should be held from behind by a horny and persistent male she too would becomes horny, and simply has to succumb) as a reasonable explanation. Instead of dealing with THOSE troubling issues (BTW, he should have thanked Mr. wandering penis. for the voluntary disclosure or else dear Sherrie would have never come forth with the truth), he decides to deal only with the seducer despite the fact that this admittedly obnoxious person, was not the one who was married to him and therefore was not the one who cheated on him. As far as remeeber it was a consensual sex. Sure hw he was a creep, who deserved to loose his license and some teeth be but he never vowed to stay loyal to the husband. Talk about misguided venting by basically a deeply wimpish husband.
Stilted dialogue, sadism, mutilation, and stupidity do not make for an erotic story. As a work of fiction, this was about as interesting as watching chainsaw fighting. No cookie for you.
The comments by KOKALE (or something close to that) were right on - as were those by the others who gave this a 0 Anybody who thinks this story was erotic, or had any merit whatever, has serious problems
Mr. Perfect got what he deserved but the slut wife got away with the betrayal with some simple tears. Good thing it is all just plain fantasy. Thanks for your efforts, author.
he got. I dont like the notion of portraying the various cheating wives as victims of a seducer. To be seduced a woman has to want sex, sex with her seducer. That isnt rape, it isnt against the womans will. It is voluntary adultry and cheating on her marriage. He didnt take them out and drug them, nor use force nor blackmail. The author presents all of the women as victims, they werent they were coconspirators in a cheating sexual affair. And in the case of the OR nurse done at work while on duty. Had she really felt wronged, she could have filed a major sexual complaint on him, and the hospital would have had to pay her a large amount of money. Problem was she wasnt wronged she chose to have the sexual act at work. She was so much into it she did not tell her husband and tried to act as if she loved just him, and was always faithful. I really wonder of a woman who has so little sexual control that if they are aroused they have to have sex right then. This woman came into a marriage at about 22 years old a virgin, with this problem? Like did she never date and get sexuall aroused? The fictional aspect of the story is very nice but the realistic scene just does not wash. Personally I would have walked away from my wife had she done this knowing she was going to cheat again and again and actually had no remorse for it until she was found out. Once a cheater always a cheater. It is a personality mindset not a spontaneous decision.
Every married man knows a woman knows how to say NO, if she wants to. I wonder how many of these male writers were ever married? Not many, if any, cause I never heard one of these wronged husbands ever say, "You know how to say NO to me." This seduced bs is just that, bs.
Every married man knows a woman knows how to say NO, if she wants to. I wonder how many of these male writers were ever married? Not many, if any, cause I never heard one of these wronged husbands ever say, "You know how to say NO to me." This seduced bs is just that, bs.
Having said that the good nurse deserved to be divorced! She was not forced into sex, she did not really object to sex, she did not call out for help, and she did not file charges. Putt another way she was a willign accomplice in her seduction and it is only her word that the seducer only used her once. He adter all had claimed several times. She lied and hid it from her husband, something no true loving spouse would have done. All told she should have been one more case of worthless trash that had thrown her own life away for lust. How can you live with and trust a woman who respects and humiliates you in such manner. She was a nurse and didnt even go get tested after but kept having sex with her husband. Yep a real special love going on there.
He got exactly what he deserved,it is one thing to set you,re goal to seduce every married woman you can ,but quite abother to go around rubbing it in everyones face and bragging about it,for all you guys out there with this fantasy be very careful,some husbands are not wimps
Pay no attention to the lonely women haters... This was a good revenge story. Anyone that takes pride in ruining other peoples marriages deserves this. Marriages should be respected and married people left alone. All sexual predators should always be isolated, encarcerated, killed, or as in this case just operated on. I liked it...
He may have castrated the ass hole, but stayed married to a cheating whore. What a Looser!
The bastard got his just desserts. Thanks for the story.
At least they were all civil about it. Alas, poor Harold...not
First - "Do no harm"
I am not sure if you did or did not honor that pledge in this one -
No argument you got yours and they got theirs - and dickhead got his.
I do enjoy the idea though - and even after over 30 years in healthcare I can see the plot develop right up to the execution moment - that last step is a LONG one though.
A previous comment quoted, "First, do no harm." Who did the harm? Dr. I-used-to have a dick. The victims simply stopped him from harming others.
Simple and effective justice.
Well done.
It is an okay story but not realistic since that many people could never keep a secret.
Besides it is natural for women, married and single, to fuck extra good looking men. It is natural selection where women when ovoluting select the best available genes for their eggs and climax with the better man but not climax with her mate.
Opinions will differ, but I didn't think this story added up to much. You created and then destroyed a straw man--the story is not much more than that.
As Harold is sure you did it what would stop him from getting revenge on you, absolutely nothing in about a couple of years you would come home to find your slut wife and children murdered and it would all be your fault.
So McQueen became a no-dick mother fucker. Just a minor chuckle. I guess you had to be there.
HA
... Ouch, now that's what I call some real revenge. Great story, well done.
A perfect solution to a perfect asshole. Oops, probably NOT so perfect after switching teams. heh heh heh
In the time of pagers and home landlines Ecstasy had not yet been formulated.
its not a secret, but a consensual conspiracy. TK U MLJ LV NV
Although, it can be sweet to have a good revenge; this was quite fantastic. We've encounter people that can take you out of your normal sense of composure. Thank God not too frequently for me, at least. The characters were well developed and easily read. I would've preferred more detail on Sherrie, just out of curiosity. I felt you fulfilled your obligation to this story with great skill and patience. I enjoyed the story in spite of its predictability. Thank you for a great effort!
Ecstasy first appeared on streets about 1980, pagers arrived about 1990, so there's nothing wrong with this timeline
then he needed to get a DNA test on the kids and a psych check on himself. Why in the world do women in these stories allow themselves and some times even take the lead in cheating and immediately begin to hate the one they got caught with? Why would a husband forgive his wife because he realized that the other man was just so much better looking and hunky than he was? Wife knew what he looked like when she married him. If she wasn't satisfied with his looks she shouldn't have married him in the first place. To my way of thinking the most grievous wrong was on the part of the wife. She was the one who vowed to remain faithful and not just until something better came along. She, by the actions of hubby in this story, should have had her vagina sewn shut allowing urination and that's all.
Cuck-a-doodle-do And by the way, forgiving this kind of betrayal doesn't make the victim seem stronger, but it does make the slut stronger and gives her the upper hand in the marriage.
Ecstasy is in the 1980's herpes has been tested / diagnosed acuratly since the 1970's he says this was before HIV and herpes while the HIV could work herpes could not so no the timeline is fucked
Love the idea in this LW story, good read. Fuck anony that asshole hates everything
Somehow it was almost poetic and borderline funny. The comments are interesting as well. DW noted that people are unlikely to be able to keep the secret - he does have a good point. Not sure why some folks hated the story - dark but poetic in a way.
He would not have remained a stubby for long. I fear he may have used the birthday party gift as a reason to enhance his meager remainders with some reconstructive creativity.
What about Sensation? Feeling? you ask? He didn't have those before the surgery.
Sunny Khiani was his name, 'the malaysian pig' we would tease him behind him, He was a Bully, it was a private school so when i would come back from holidays, he would come sniffin for the stuff i brought back,Naturally i planned to masturbate inside a few sandwiches, so i made a big show of opening the sandwiches when he came near my locker & i began eating the only sandwich without my special man 'sauce', he looked at me & did not even bother with asking, just grabbed them all & went had it with his other bully friends, i waited patiently for a year, till the end of the school. on the last day in front of all the boys of my class & most of the others, i revealed my dastardly secret of the creamy sandwiches to him & his other friends.
oh my god, that was the day i learnt the value of patience, the look of horror on his face, while everybody began laughing, he suddenly began come out of the shock & rushed to punch me but was held back by his friends as there were too many in my side.
my things were all loaded & packed i just opened the car door & drove off, having had the best day of my life till then.
I'm glad justice was served, but this line confused me:
"At least he learned how to take it up his ass."
Is this supposed to be taken literally? Because nothing was said in the story.
As an Anon said, didn't any of these women learn the word "No"? I'm sure they've said it to their husbands often enough!
Sherrie was a slut who didn't get punishment. Harry is able to talk his way into her panties in just 3 hours. That is a slut reaction. She knew what Harry was after as soon as he started talking to her. A chaise wife would have just kick Harry in the balls. This makes her husband a willing cuckold since he didn't want to punish his slut wife for fucking Harry! I have a feeling that this author is a closet cuckold!
No amount of revenge can eliminate a cheating wife,s extra- marital sex. This tale shows how easily women can be persuaded to have sex anywhere and with any one. Wives should only enjoy sex with other men at the behest of their husbands or partners. Traddis
Well the cuckold and his cuckolding wife can live happily till the next persuasive seducer comes along.
Good work.On Dr McQueen. His shortcomings were greatly enhanced. Way too light on the wife. Should have been more repercussions.
This gets high marks because of the revenge. Unfortunately, the prose is often wooden; the martian slut ray cliche makes an appearance; the wife committed adultery and lied to her husband, yet gets off scot-free; and the husband is like the husbands in the author's other stories, essentially a cuck who, without any serious repentance by the cheating wife, will forgive her anything as long as she stops. The only thing that saves this from a 1 is the dickectomy at the end.
Or you could just beat his ass like a rented mule and kick his nuts till he sings sorprano. Story is poor.
Once the operation was done I would have dumped the cheating wife. She too easily gave in to the creep knowing full well his reputation.
Good move leaving the balls. But would have been tortured for his entire life with unquenchable horniness. Good one.
Still a cuck and still has a wife worthy of tossing to the curb. Despite all the real world cucky boys that wear the badge with honor, it is not something to aspire too.
A fun whimsical tail, but obviously not a real doctor. A Urologist would know how to easily sever or damage the nerves that would cause him permanent ED. No erection, no fun. Just a drain hose for his bladder. He could also cause permanent incontinence. 4 stars only because it was funny.
Wow, i actually found the most ridiculous and unbelievable story on this site. I have said that before but this one is really asinine. The only parts of this story that are even remotely plausible is the cheating and Dr McQueen (God knows I have seen the type).
Everyone present at the party has been harmed by the doctor. Those present are medical professionals. The wife of a urologist plied him with alcohol. A nurse anesthetist was present. Do you honestly believe the police wouldn't investigate? That the hospital wouldn't investigate? Get the fuck out. This is dumb as hell.
The esteemed Angel’s scathing comment led me to read this again. It is a bit of outrageous revenge fantasy porn, but no less ridiculous than the majority of other stories on this site. We are insulted daily with ever more repulsive cuckold humiliation stories, frequently starring the stereotypical Jamal and white trash whore. Characters happily cheat, swing, swap, share, and indulge in all manner of perversion in 90% of the stories. I prefer the believable retribution in Hooked, Vande1, and other favorite authors, but OOT revenge from saddletramp, LT56, and a few others is always fun and refreshing to read. It’s all fantasy and forgotten 5 minutes after you read it.
Evidently most of the female workers at the hospital were rampant sluts to fall for the good Doctors bullshit.
Very enjoyable story - very well written with good imagination. Doesn’t have to be perfect - it’s a story