by gf04191947
Love that little shocker at the very end.....he underestimated his quiet, sweet, sexually conservative wife!!
This could have been a fine, fun and rollicking tale, and so very erotic it its telling.
However, the turgid prose it seem far more like the confession of a Baptist accounting professor.
It was also lacking almost completely in the kind of eroticism that flows out through detailed description of people in passionate moments.
Consequently, I just couldn't make it through to he end.
Loosen up, recall your own experiences in detail, and write in a way that brings the readers right in there with you ... and makes them want to watch the whole thing.
A woman who would suck another's dick & had never sucked mine, I would ditch her.