All Comments on 'My Sexual Family Ch. 02'

The sex scene between mother and daughter has got to be one of the hottest I've read here in a while- even with the fisting stuff (which I personally don't go in for- diff'rent strokes an' all that). The imagery was just as superb as in the first installment. Couple that with the scene-setting tools you used (sounds, scents, colors, etc.) and you've managed to "wow" me.

The "morning after" scene seemed a little rushed, but decent. I'm not exactly sure of where the story is heading now, but if you plan on having another encounter between mother/daughter and the sex-toy-woman, I would kind of advise against it: too obvious. I mean, this young woman and her family have only JUST been initiated to the incest taboo- bringing a third party into their "games" so quickly, in real life, would be quite a stretch for ANYONE.

I also was a little... uhm... disappointed at the blase attitude of her brothers. Granted they were properly eager, but their acceptance of her tryst with Mom seemed WAY too immediate- almost like it was expected, like they'd known all along that their sister was hip to this new lifestyle. That threw me a bit. Even if they aren't earnestly surprised by this new development, they should at least offer a token of surprise- a gasp or a curious question such as, "Hey! Since WHEN???" Y'know?

This Valerie character might be a decent segue, since it's somewhat pre-existent, but keep the focus on the FAMILY if you can. Delving too deeply in the cummings (har-har) and goings of the other city-dwellers could end up derailing the whole she-bang, distracting from the core of the story.

There were a couple typos that I noticed- not necessarily glaring ones, but I would encourage you to stay mindful of those in the future as they CAN break the "flow" sometimes- especially in a hot sex scene!

All in all, it's an okay second installment. Bottom line: keep the story as true to "real life" as you can. Have fun with it, absolutely, but holding fast to a sense of realism (cause/effect, consequences and consciences) could make this series a real winner, IMHO. See if you can make these people less plastic and more "real"- your audience will thank you in the long run!

All I can say is WOW, really great story....i would like to see more..Kajun Kitty you realy cool like the way your wrote...

John

JDPKG@aol.com

please let me hear the final part of this story, it is sooo amazingly hot

Hi

I really enjoyed the second part of your story. I can't wait to read Part 3.

Your stories remind me of the stories I have written about my brother and his family. We are very close.

Keep up the good work!

Philip

With all the inches of dick and pussy around that family you could probably include some extended family..Aunts, uncles and grand parents from both sides of the family tree.Keep up the good work.

I can't wait for part Three. Please let there be more!

Good story, keep it cumming!

I am starting to write of my own adventures or stories and am hoping I can be as hot as you, keep them cumming, love Jenni.

Hey have some more chapter 3. That was very erotica story all there family keep it up. thanks....

Please! We have to know what happens next! Great writing!

great narration please keep writing and what happened next not come so far please give it fast and keep giving amazing stories like this to keep the romance alive

Hey Kitty - from one female author to another - I would love to commend you on your first 2 stories - I think you will be a very popular writer - I know that the readers love Incest stories and especially Mom/Son ones - so keep up the great work - my Member name is Jena121 - if you would like to read my stories - take care - keep writing - Luv Deexx

Hey Kitty - from one female author to another - I would love to commend you on your first 2 stories - I think you will be a very popular writer - I know that the readers love Incest stories and especially Mom/Son ones - so keep up the great work - my Member name is Jena121 - if you would like to read my stories - take care - keep writing - Luv Deexx

Hey Kitty - from one female author to another - I would love to commend you on your first 2 stories - I think you will be a very popular writer - I know that the readers love Incest stories and especially Mom/Son ones - so keep up the great work - my Member name is Jena121 - if you would like to read my stories - take care - keep writing - Luv Deexx

I know I probably sound like everyone else but please give us another chapter you left it at a great spot can't wait to read what comes next. Keep writing its fantastic. Love it

I must read part 3 soon! Amazing imagery!

Another great story, wonderfully written that I couldn't resist indulging myself as I read, wishing I was part of that family. I hope you'll continue this series, and I know I'm not alone!

Awesome story and well written. I like that you get to the point and all the naughty bits directly, yet it doesn't feel rushed. I loved the fisting angle you incorporated, ( being a huge fan of female fisting ), I would only ask that in future chapters/ stories you continue to include some fisting/double vag action. Maybe in the next chapter between mommy's toys and the boys, Denis tight little pussy can be trained to double fist her brothers hands.; while mommy works her girls tight ass. Looking forward to many more submissions from you dear.

does she fuck her brothers?

will be part 3?

I'm looking forward to this building up!