by xybertech
The "author" here seems to be a bit on the simple side. I know, not terribly PC these days, but still, soft-in-the-head seems to be the only explanation.
The first paragraph is a doozy, including "They did not have any parents left..." (None left at all? Gosh, most people have absolute *dozens* of parents!) It was already headed downhill, but from there on it was a rapid acceleration.
Fail.
Not bad but not great either. Think I would've settled for some quick fix oral lovin for now and saved the fuckin for the next time, when they had more time. AND, at some point, the wife is going to discover them.. I wonder, Will she join in? (just a footnote, my wife would join).