All Comments on 'My Sister, My Lap'

No build up,

Why when she has as boyfriend does she need here bother

Al so No way would he pull out just shot his cum deep up inside her unprotected pussy like any red blooded male

Should’ve have disclosed that this story was inspired by a million other similar stories on this site.

this site is full of lazy writers who edit stories they read on this very site.

But in all it was an enjoyable story. Maybe have a pary two where Dane finds out and joins in.

I enjoyed it keep writing.

This is to “Poor”, not every man is a pig and cums inside a woman after she asks him not too! Maybe you will learn that when you grow up and mature!!

I really like “riding on lap” stories, even wrote one, and this one was good.

Would have liked a little more background on what made the sister flip a switch like that. But when that switch flipped the sex scenes where very well written and hot.

Well done. 5*s

I really enjoyed this, nice setup and a sexy conclusion.

Good premise.

But sex happens too fast. There's the scene in the back seat of the car where he finger fucks her. But nothing else. She's a participant only to the extent that she pulls his hand to her pussy -- then she does nothing but enjoy.

Next, in his bedroom. No foreplay. No buildup. She blows him. She has him eat her pussy. They fuck. Boom. Boom. Boom.

He was fascinated with her ass. Then it was ignored. Breast play? Nope.

Why did she have to dive on his cock to get in into her mouth? Why no touchy-feelie of playing with it a while, teasing him before he got to cum? She could have asked him if he was ready to cum? Did he want to cum now? Would he like to cum in her hand? On her tits? In her mouth.

It could have been a great story, but it seemed to be written to get it over as quickly as possible.

Four stars. For potential.

All brother sister incest stories must end in pregnancy

I like it, but could be a lot more detailed in their dialogue. It thought it was too short and rushed. I really do like it but wish you would do another rewrite on this story.

Not sure what the complaints are about, everyone has a way they like a story to be told. But if you don't like the way this one is written, if it's too long, too short, too much detail or not enough, might I suggest you find a different story or write your own. I liked the story, good job.

This was really good. Well done.

Very sexy story. I would have liked a little more detail and buildup, but it's your story, so you can tell it your way.