All Comments on 'My Sister's Wedding'

It's a very beautiful story. It definitely a five star 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟. Thank you.

I just finished reading "My Sister's Wedding" and it blew me away. I would rate this one of the Top Ten Romance stories on this site. Keep up the Outstanding Work.

The man is an amazing story teller. I like that so may of his stories teach valuable lessons for life.

In most of this cuck writer's stories, established men find readymade families to settle down with

WOW ! 5 Stars for a great love story. Thanks DG Hear.

If only there were a part where we get to know that Toni was banging the MC's brother just before marriage; just the way he did with his brothers - it would help close all the loose ends.

Great Story!! I Loved it!!

Great author, great romance, great read.

DGH does it again - 5*

A few parts we weren’t overly found of, but we’re so very misty over the whole love story.

We thank you for such a great read and reminding everyone what’s soooo important in life and your relationship with your significant other loved ones.

I am not real fond of the MC in college; at least he was a man whore.

Cute. Actually, darn good. Great twists and turns. The guy was really a horn dog but turned out OK.

Excellent story line and lots of unexpected situations (having made love to all his sisters-in-law for instance). I loved how the lyrics of the song at the end match the hope and the longevity of marriages as demonstrated by the grandparents generation. They must have discovered the real recipe of long successful relationships based on active and productive communications instead of reverting to cheating and/or swapping.

I loved the way Toni comes back with excellent, intelligent and quick answers and responses to her husband with a loving smile and lots of heart.

Easily 5* ++++

BJ

it's strange the way you have with wives who unilaterally stop taking contraception at the time of their marriage without warning or informing their husband.

The one thing I have a problem with was the sister-in-law who wanted a little strange before she settled down. What is to stop her from wanting a little more before having kids or any other major life issues. Red flags for serial cheater.

Good story!! But why do all men become pussy-whipped after marriage....even thus guy

What a warm and loving romance story. It just doesn't get any better than this. Well done 5++stars

Ah D G i just love a great romance wish I could have one Best wishes (jaybee186)

What's the point of a six page story when the ending is a foregone conclusion on page 1? As soon as Chris mentions Toni it is done, there's no mystery as to what will happen next. Romance feels like it needs some suspense instead of certainty from the get go.

Yes ,I think his brother deserved to know his future wife was expecting a proposal from him shortly but was off looking for sex with strangers before it would happen. There might be room there but a true brother would not keep it a secret.

Thot it was a well written love story.

My only issue with this author is that in his stories he seems to equate the depth of love with how good the sex is ( I know that even though we haven't made love yet, that I love you. ) love based on sex will fail. Love based on a feeling (also known as lust) will fail. Love is a choice. I chose to love my wife and she chose to love me. Thats why you say those 2 words of choice at the altar... "I Do!" I knew long before i made love to my wife that i deeply loved her and it has only grown deeper over the last 36 years.

4****

OMG What a beautiful and romantic story. Definitely a five star rating 🌟👍🌟👍🌟👍🌟👍🌟👍

After she retired as a USN SEAL Commander, and discovered sunken treasure off Key West, she was able to buy into the clinic.

That's how it works, right?

I’ve read this story several times and always have enjoyed it. One of my favorites here at Literotica! ~ 5+

Held my interest all the way thru.

Someone asked how Toni afforded half a Vet Clinic with Student Loans and paying for that Clinic but obviously it was generosity,Toni was described as an Angel and people loved and adored her and wanted to help her and Jessie.

It was so special that John found and fell in love with Toni and Jessie to give them everything since Toni's first Husband died.Admittedly John was the Black Sheep of the Family but eventually he settled down and found Toni and lived happily ever after and reconnected with his loved ones.So I am glad this story worked out so good.

If Toni has a student loan,where did she get the money to buy into the vet practice and a house?.

Such an enjoyable read. Very engaging characters that make you hope for the best for them. Bravo

This was an awesome story. Very well written. Keep up the good work

Beautiful storey

Why do people write stories where it's supposed to be serious, the narrator isn't trying to be friends with the reader, etc, but then totally ruin everything-and I mean everything-by then going of into some crap like, "I have to go back to tell you about my college days." What, is that the only way to do a flashback? Is it even necessary if the story got on well enough before then? What about, "When I was in college...?" Is that such a burden? Yes, to many writers that ought to know better, it is too much to step away from the really formulaic structures that plague amateur stories. Like the second paragraph in LW stories describing the narrator's name, height, weight, eye color, muscle tone, then his wife's bust measurements, eye color, name, weight, etc. How terribly dreadful.

I think this is a very nice story, as is the usual when DGH is the author. My only problem with it is “John’s” description of himself as the black sheep of the family. I don’t think he fully understands the term. I mean, he has dinner with his parents, at least occasionally. His sister claims he’s her favorite brother. His other siblings still treat him nicely. Trust me, that’s not the way a “Black Sheep” gets treated. I know from bitter experience. But my nit-picking aside, this is a great story, no doubt 5 star worthy.

I don’t believe this story is up to DG Hear standards.

Feels empty yet it’s a 6 of story.

No backing to the feelings, meaning he or she feels them without supporting emotions.

I was definitely turned off when earlier Toni state she does not want any anal sex at all.

Then give her no warning he thrust =

"Just a finger or two. I promise I won't hurt you."

Who the f__k does he think he is?

And her response was

“She agreed”

Doesn’t make sense= ie not supported.

This is below par, your other stories are better.

But I thank you for your effort.

You are quickly becoming one of my favorite authors here on Literotica. Your stories always develop your characters nicely. Thank you for hours of entertainment.

But I gotta say, with a family like his, I understand why he doesn't come around much. Too many "meddlers".

I laughed and laughed and laughed! It was a beautiful peace that left the reader filling in the gaps in the sentences and paragraphs with imagination. I don't know much about writing styles but I loved how this story flowed and the unexpecting humour that rose up. Thanks so much!

Simply The best.Good writing Skill. Kind of story i always enjoy.

you have a great imagination and write very believable stories....loved it.....

Some writers seem to think that a good story need a lot of twist and complications to be good. You've proben them wrong. I truly enjoyed it. Simply great

you have good writing skills. the story isn't too bad but my personal opinion is that you can make them better. I find the plot to be rather dry... the characters were developed well but i was unhappy that the reason for them getting married was to accommodate for lack of cabins available.

Just absolutly, Positively GREAT.

I would write a longer comment, but I'm crying so hard I can't see to type. Loved the story!

I don't know what's about this story, but I can't get enough of it. I have read it over and over again A big thank you for writing a master piece of a story about romantic comedy and love. Love you all! Bye. Greg. ..10 stars.

That story is by far the best one I've ever read here!

With talent like this you need to exercise it by writing more. Keep practising and who knows you may find there is a book in you.

This is a one hell of a story, i really enjoyed it, great job !!

Damn, you should be writing movies scripts :)

If this story is for real then i wish you all the luck in life to you and your family.

A work of art. Keep writing.

right up till the very last.

you would think she would discuss it with her new husband before going off the birth control pills.

As I have stated before about a few stories on literoica, it is way to good not to have been published in the mainstream press.

George in Omaha

Awesome story and captivating characters .

Very good job of character development and describing the families. A serious scenario with the death of a soldier that you turned into a nice love story. I enjoyed this very much.

It was good but at most of the time dialogues were too gay from john . I mean crying and all that

If it isn't i show already I wouldn't believe u :)

i really liked this one

Another great story. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

Thank you.

what a wonderful, loving story. THANK YOUY

What a super romantic story , well told. Congratulations

Reading Your Story Made Me Realize What a Good Wife I Have. Thank You.

Loved it.

it was a compelling love story, with family involied .. not just a stud fuck story..

i hope u write more storys,

I've not read all of DG's stories, so I'm unaware of any 'formula'. But as soon as Jessie showed up, I knew where it was headed. . .

I tend to agree, the opening bits about him fucking all his brothers' wives seemed to point in a very different direction, and I'm not sure what real purpose it served in telling the story. At first, I was half-expecting to read about John's behind-the-scenes adventures with all his SILs on the cruise ship. And every time a new female in-law was introduced, I half-expected to hear about how John had fucked her too, once upon a time. But DG was telling an entirely different story. . .

All that said, I enjoyed the story. But then, I'm as much of a hopeless romantic as the next guy. And gosh - the love preceded the sex; what a concept!

I would be far less than pleased to find out my wife stopped birth control without talking to me first! Happy about the baby -YES ! But the secret about the birth control is a big NO NO!

I would also be miffed to not be told first about my own new baby! This is his family, not his in-laws or his folks but his. Wife has violated same rules of due order of business of a family and marriage.

Other wise loved the story !

No not the awesome people in the story you just read about joy and happiness and family -

The dickhead with the one track mind below - a future sister in law makes a poor choice but find a loving person to have it with who respects her life choice - (not a married woman by the way not even engaged) so this story completely sucks nothing good here move along - wow

GREAT STORY - wonderful read thank you !!

A super dupper story. Lovely read. Thank you. But where is DWidiot? He/she can smell out a good story from miles away and then come and shit on it. Too old, unrealistic or "oh my God there are cops in it" or worse violence! Thank God he hasn't found this one yet. Loved it. Thanks. Jim

You are one of my favorite authors. Your stories are realy good and you don't sex everyone to death.

Flippin loved this story.

Not mine...I loved the story....as for ...fucking his brothers girl friends....read the story again ...they all happened before anyone was committed to the other.

Thanks for a good read.

it starts out with him fucking his brother girlfriend, then he said nothing while this slut married into his family and all you fags act as if this the greatest story in the world. This whole story was bullshit because of how it started.

Wow! Great story. Don't care if it's fact or fiction, I just enjoyed it. Got a little misty eyed a few times, but I'm a hopeless romantic. Thanks for writing it. Ted

Now that is what its all about! Love, ultimate true love! It comes when you least expect it. Very good story... showing that it takes work, and patiences. The work is honest caring communication and patiences in restraining your sexual needs to show you aren't just an rutting animal in heat but really do care for your intended... I love this story...

hey buddy! i must tell you that your story made me fall in love with my husband again.Thanks for such a lovely notion about happy marriage.lol.

i have no words to describe it simply the best

I have never left a comment on a story prior to this. However, I really did enjoy this. It was not a wham bam than you ma'am story, but one with feeling and heart. Don't know if the events are real or not, but a great story non the less.

DG, I never tire from reading your stories.. most all, like this one, "multiple times"

Thanks Again!

Alan

I loved the depth of your story and the passion you portray through your words. Giving enough to keep reading, I love it. Sexy and intriguing. Great job. I hope you WIN IT!!!

@ Dear H. H. Morant I read many stories on Lit and SOL T think DGHear's stories are equal level. Yes some amataur writers can produce better stories but his/her all stories are not equal level. When you start a DGHear's story you know you will get similar quality without disapointment. I think to write same good level is a great thing.

The story: DG's formula redux. A lot of people like his stories - but that doesn't make him the best writer ever on this list, or even very good. Consider Dan Brown's potboilers (e.g. The DaVinci Code. Commercial success? Immensely so. Good writing, in any sense of the word other than being a commercial success? Are you kidding?

The editing cleans up the grammar and spelling - but I wonder if it sucks the life out of the story? The author's characters always sound the same - the male protagonist, his true love, villains (if there are any)

Singed comments: My God, nobody uses his/her real name. To demand anonymity beyond that is absolute cowardice. If somebody doesn't like what I write - at least they'll know who (in the world of Literotica, at least) wrote it

this is one of the best stroies i have ever read. it was erotic but gentle at the same time i think it was a bueatiful storie and you should right more it was longer then i expected but well worth it. great job,

Hi my name is chris. I read this story 4 days ago and still i'm not able to get this story out from my mind. So i came back here to tell you this. Your story is keep on playing in my mind like a movie. Some incidents of ur story are stucked inside my mind like a leech who stucked in a vaccum jar. My fav incident of your story when she told him in the ear "I KNEW YOU WERE JEALOUS" i luv that part. Dear author you are great. I don't have the words to describe your greatness. Keep making more stories like this one. You are the best erotic love story's author in this whole world....!

It was way longer than most of the stories on this site, so I wasn't expecting it, but it was so good I couldn't stop reading!

you the man wish you and yours the best.. maybe one day i will experience heaven..peace

I got weepy eyed a couple of times. Almost forgot it was an erotic story. Very good.

It's going to show from anonymous, but you can call me ¢huck

Best story i had ever read in my whole life. I Wish i could give you more than 5 stars.

Awesome story

Another red H! I love to read your stories, DG.

To the prior poster, I suggest you read some of DG other stories. Also those written by DanielKitten.

When Jessie asked John if she could call him "daddy," I cried. I almost forgot I was reading an erotic story because it felt like I was reading a pretty good novel!

Nice story, although the red herring of sleeping with all the sister-in-laws as well as April, had me wondering if the cruise was going to be some kind of orgy with secrets coming out left and right. I kept wondering where the sister-in-law angle was going. You are a cruel tease! ;)

But a nice romantic story works as well.

Had to chuckle at some of the comments. "For a beginning writer..." almost had me laughing out loud. Keep up the great stories, and best of luck in the contest.

A story like yours comes along so seldom. It was sexy but not blatantly so. It dealt with everyday people and how their lives were interconnected.

It overwhelmed me how beatiful your story was. Also how beautifully written it was.

I hope you will continue to write and share your stories with us.

I'd have to agree that the protagonist did seem somewhat self-absorbed in the beginning. He was more likeable once the explanation of how he had ended up fucking all his brothers' wives came out.

Toni and Jessie especially were great. One couldn't help but be attracted to them both.

All in all, I suspect you achieved your objectives with these characters and I enjoyed the story. Thanks

Thanks for the the feedback to my comment. I don't have a story in this contest, so I'm not sure what "submission" you are referring to. But if it makes you feel better to bash the lone story I wrote a year ago, by all means do so.

I didn't allow comments on that story because I don't think it's fair to authors to allow people to comment anonymously. That's why, unlike you, I commented under my Lit nickname in this thread.

I stand by the comments I previously made about this story because that is how I truly felt. And I would think that the author would appreciate any honest feedback that might help her\him to improve their skills. If you disagree with me, that's entirely your right and I respect your right to voice your opinions.

It beats the crap out of your story. I encourage everyone to go to Dream_Operators page and vote for his submittal. He won't allow comments so I guess your vote will tell him what you think.

DG, your story was great as usual.

For a beginning writer, I thought you did a good job.

That said, the opening was like reading someone's resume and I quickly lost interest.

Writing in first person is difficult if the narrator doesn't engage the reader, and for me the protagonist seemed self-absorbed. Who cares if he banged his sister-in-laws? Or has twelve people working for him?

Nobody has the knack for writing a story that makes a person feel good like you do, my friend. Even though this one didn't have any plot twists or truly wicked characters, it just became a joy to read the deeper you got into it. Just adore your work, man.

Loved it, well written as usual, and a lovely Romantic Story. Wish I could vote more than 5

DG,

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

X

I'm an island of negativity in a sea of love. But geez, this is so formulaic. It's DG Hear's formula,of course, because no one but him could have written it.

But in that sea of love, isn't there some rough water, sometimes? I guess I'm just a cranky guy, but this kind of stuff should be in small doses, not six pages of constant artificial sugar.

Hey, DG always writes well. Okay,serve me some sweetness,but give me an order of conflict on the side.

Another great story!

And I still admit it.

One of the harder parts of copy editing a story is to keep faith with the character doing the narrating. John, the narrator, is a web designer and engineer, not a professor of English; although college-educated, he does not eschew, in ordinary speech such as DG Hear has put into his mouth here, the Middle Western United States vernacular with which he grew up. Therefore, John will, at times, make grammatical lapses. It is my job, as quibbler/copy editor, to keep the character, and his voice, as DG Hear intended, only correcting what I conceive to be errors that would distract the reader.

As DG Hear is a much finer writer than you or I could ever be, when I send back his text as edited, I have no problem if he rejects any suggestion I make. It is my first principle of quibbling/copy editing that the story is the author's story, first, last and always.

Or, as another editor, with whom I have not always agreed, has suggested as a first principle, that of Hippocrates: "First, do no harm."

DG Hear has made John real. He made you, and me, and all his readers, care about his character and his story. My contribution is minuscule by comparison.

really enjoyable

Did someone admit to being the copy editor of this story? DG is a fine writer but he has never learned that the first person singular pronoun, when it is the object of a preposition or verb, is always me and not I. You should have caught that frequent error in this otherwise "flawless" piece.

Very beautiful story. I understood the whole consept of John sleeping with his brother's wives. It was just a way of tying in 'its better to have loved and lost, then ever to have loved at all'. Jessie's character is just cute. Cute is a simple word, but it fits that little girl. And yes Toni stopped taking her birth control, but if she and john loved eachother as much as your story portrays then starting a family shouldn't be an issuse at all. I just can't say enough about your story, I hope you win.