All Comments on 'My Teenage God Ch. 01'

A good first effort but could use some edliting help.

Parts of the descriptive passages and some of the dialog is a bit awkward.

But it's a good story line and I give it a 5 for effort expecting the next chapter will show improvement.

Quiet enjoyed this story. Can't wait to see what else you got!!!

I could imagine myself servicing this god. Great story!

Would love to hear why breanne was so giggly and timid at the beginning of the story. Will max have a tutor harem by the end? ;)

Please put chapter 6 soon and since Max has at least 20 slaves who probably worship him how about having them meet like a cult and please him

Amazing story! Please write more!! Such a talent!

Max's sudden interest in David, Max's living situation, and David's willingness to take that risk so soon are all unrealistic. This would have been better as a slow burn in which we find out why the characters behave as they do. Also, you need to proofread.

More please!!