All Comments on 'My Time with Sammi'

you can write, and this is potentially a good and very original story, so I stuck it to the end. BUT. The constant chages of tense and person were very disruptive. You really need an editor to help you. You could be very good, with a little help, but you're not there yet.

I thought this story very imaginative and well done. The style took some getting used to and might have been a little less challenging, but I like that. Overall it shows that this writer has talent. I'd like to read more. Thanks for a very enteraining story.

... but then you just had to try to pretend the reader was one of the participants!!

Result?

Total turn off!!

The reader (at least this one) knows that they were NOT a participant and so therefore any chance at believability went straight out the window!

No believability = waste of time reading any further!

1 star!!