All Comments on 'My Very First Girlfriend'

Good story!

5

A very sweet story. Thanks! 5*

Good story, I liked it a lot.

Why do you keep calling Alice his ex girlfriend? They were 7 goddamn years old. For fucks sakes man, use your head.

And then this bullshit about blackmail and having sex? Seriously? Fuck that.

good story different concept enjoyed it will look at your other stories now 5 for me

A story like this being told from the POV of a third party doesn't really work. It seems intrusive as hell!

Also, despite the privacy concerns of one of the two primary parties, the narrating third party informs several other uninvolved persons about what is going on. That shows gross disrespect for privacy.

Good story, with a different twist on an old trope.

Interesting angle.

Of course Carol can never trust Alice. She's shown that if a bully pressures her she'll give in without asking for help.

Good tale, very enjoyable read. 5* .

Was okay, but not great.

She wasn't his ex. Why aren't on the she never said sorry, when it never played into the story.

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A decent attempt at being unique by writing from the perspective of the friend who caught her, but it just didn't work that well. Not a bad read, but not a great one either.

After all, it is not at all clear what Alice and Reginald were doing on all those Wednesdays when they were "late at work"? Where did they go after the bar on the day when the main character followed them after work? And after the evening of dancing at the hotel, I suppose Alice went to the room that Reginald rented? Alice claims they didn't have penetrative sex, but what was holding Reginald back when Alice was alone with him and at his mercy so many times?

Basically a nice, but not a great story...

...there were a few questions left open at the end, but I found it interesting that her becoming pregnant with his sperm was enough to heal the rift with her parents.

Whatever works... 4 stars.

Dawn was definitely cheating on him. It's a shame she got away with it.

Really sweet and enjoyable story. 5 from me.

A very nice story. Thank you.

Anon, Your comment "Dawn was definitely cheating on him. It's a shame she got away with it." I would love to know how you got to that conclusion, it maybe something I could use later. I currently have about a dozen unfinished stories but always looking for more story lines.

Les

but she still didn't say sorry

Good story with a lot of happy endings.

I get it, but it was boring, really, really boring

Not the usual tropes, and happy endings for everyone!

5-stars

Wait how can any reader think Dawn was cheating on him? Wth? The IQ of some readers on this site has really deteriorated over the years. Anyways good story with a unique perspective.

Umm how is Carol supposed to believe there was no sex at any time with all the late Wednesday nights for a couple of months? They had dinner, got into a car and disappeared on the one Wednesday. So what handjobs, blowjobs, fingering? That is all just papered over. Even if one can believe the night at the conference. No doubt she was being blackmailed. But the buildup had a lot more that just the conference. Heck first night he saw her, she lied about an open marriage (isn't that kind of a big deal) and Reginald paid the bar tab via his hotel room. Doesn't that imply she went back to the hotel with him while Carol was away? What did they do in that room? Play cribbage?

Well,did Reginald hand in his notice?.