by RhondaParker54
You just described my ultimate fantasy. Please continue with this series
Cute story, but too much repetition and looping to be considered a favorite. Don't give up, it's a brave thing to put yourself out there as a writer, we all appreciate that. You just need to clean up your prose.
I liked the idea of your story. I try not to be critical of style, but switching person was distracting.
Thank you for your comments both in praise or criticism. To those that are anonymous. that criticise at least have the courage to show your name and I might just take notice.
I am sorta well known with my name in other realms so due to the content of my post I will be anonymous.
I do agree with some of the critiques but if you are just first publishing it is delightful. Nice story line. Maybe use an editor? In my life this fantasy would be improbable as my wife used to go on search and destroy missions to find my cache. Even as recently as a week ago I lost a sexy romper, two sexy off the shoulder tops, and several bras. So, that could not be my adventure but if it is your adventure or fantasy, go for it!
- K
The writing was ok, there were a few spelling & grammatical errors but it didn't spoil the flow of the story. It was the content which was poor. So a straight guy, married for 25 years becomes a raving homosexual overnight because his wife found him dressed en femme. Not only that but she encouraged him ? Really ?
Loved reading this, how she embraced and took hold of the situation
I truly wish my wife was more like Jane. She knows about my desire to dress up but wants nothing to do with it. Storyline is wonderful so far.
Hi, my issue is why do the men end up sucking cock. This happens way too often.
This is not my fantasy,
Pretty simple. When she wants him to wax the ansser is no. When she goes thru his phone (not possible without the security number) she invades his privacy. When she brings others into their private lives he divorces her.